12/4 FDS: Of Pride and Honor

[Revvie®]

Its been a stressful week and i know this is a bit of a last day sort of thing, but i think it turned out well. and of course good luck to CBT and Feedback is always appreciated.

Revvie

Of Pride and Honor

[CBT]

Breath taking RP, this is exactly the reason why I could find no perfect words for my RP. I know you all to well, your not just a great man to beat, but besting you is like besting myself and doing more than I could possibly repeat.
Not sure on the whole bodygaurd deal, but your RP was exactly the message we have been trying to send. The standard set. While I know one day we may meet again, and i will find comfort in whatever direction I take with it.

I just had to give the savior his due. The sermon topped it off. You can take your bow, bravo Roo.

[Revvie®]

thacbt said:

Breath taking RP, this is exactly the reason why I could find no perfect words for my RP. I know you all to well, your not just a great man to beat, but besting you is like besting myself and doing more than I could possibly repeat.
Not sure on the whole bodygaurd deal, but your RP was exactly the message we have been trying to send. The standard set. While I know one day we may meet again, and i will find comfort in whatever direction I take with it.

I just had to give the savior his due. The sermon topped it off. You can take your bow, bravo Roo.

Thank ya man, i was a bit dissapointed that you werent able to muster up you usual but im sure we will face again, also the whole bodgyguard thing was setting an angle, thats all that was lol. thanks for the comment man.

Revvie

[kd]

My God, he has truely blessed you with a great talent in writing. I love the part I was able to read. I am still at school right now, but I plan to go back and try to read more later during my planning period. Damn kids! lol

But anyways, you have to teach me how to do those backgrounds with the story and all. It just adds to the whole thing to me and makes it truly more personal in terms of who it is coming from. Keep it up bro.

[DAN]

First off...LMFAO!!!!

thacbt said:

...your not just a great man to beat...

Now down to the serious stuff. Rev, this RP was freakin' awesome! I swear, since I've returned to the WFWF I have been taken back by your RP's, they are so good compared to your older work. Your speech is something I admire and aspire to be able to have in my RP's and your descriptive writing has deifnitly come along.

Overall, this RP was ill man. My word for the day is "ill". Good luck, this RP is a match winner.

[Calvin]

oh wow.......you know, reading this rp.....totally gave me a great idea.....Rev, I never thought I would say this....but your rp just totally gaveme a whole new outlook at rping. AKA, you inspired me. Like, your style......just made me think of a new style that I'm going to try out. We'll see, for surely I'mgoing to be in this for another week...I gotta try out this style I have in my mind.

Ok, down to the rp. It's more the style I like here. You description has two things in it. One, bascially your description is where I find a lot of your "monolugue speech" seems to be. Like, stuff you dont' want anyone to hear. Bascially, your conscience. I like that. Two, it has the usual setting. Your description is first person. I find first person extremely hard to write in, as well, you gotta write it in someone's perspective, that's a real challenge.

Your speech is so formal. Imtimidating, and formal. That's how I look at Rev when I read your stuff. It makes your character fit the role of an owner perfectly, or a leader....whatever you wanna call it. Great rp, it's a shame CBT couldn't give you a run for your money on this rp....although no offense to him, this rp probably would have taken it anyways.

[Kurt Burton: Script Doctor!]

Good work Rev, I definately get a psychological or metaphysical twist premonition coming from Michael, and I love how everyone was pissing you off. I would have bitch smaked that stewardess to be honest. Well, Good luck against CBT.

[thesouthsidekid]

I have apparently seen the bar in WFWF.

Now on reader's level. I was intriuged as you told an excellent story, using multiple scenes and exclaimed thoughts and actions from a first person view which can be difficult to do. The dialouge between yourself and every other person involved was excellent and descriptions were top notch. The icing on this was the sermon at the end. I love when in a rp, a character shows a faithful side and quotes scripture. And where your character uses this faith as a base, it only seems fitting.

Overall, a very good job Rev.