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Post by Yoshihiko The G.O.A.T on Jun 8, 2015 22:05:31 GMT -5
ROSTER Triple H Ric Flair Batista Shawn Michaels Randy Orton Chris Jericho Edge Christian Shelton Benjamin Gene Snitsky Kane Daivari La Resistance - Grenier & Conway William Regal & Tajiri Eugene Rhyno Hurricane Rosey Maven Val Venis Matt Hardy
Women Roster Lita Trish Stratus Christy Hemme Candice Michelle Victoria Stacy Keibler
On Air Personnel GM: Eric Bischoff Jim Ross Jonathan Coachman Jerry Lawler
ROSTER John 'Bradshaw' Layfield Orlando Jordan The Undertaker Big Show Kurt Angle Mark Jindrak John Cena Carlito Eddie Guerrero Booker T Rey Mysterio Charlie Haas The Dudleyz - All 3 of them Chavo Guerrero Rob Van Dam Rene Dupree Heidenreich Hardcore Holly Funaki Paul London Akio Billy Kidman Nunzio Scotty 2 Hotty Shannon Moore
Women Roster Dawn Marie Michelle McCool Torrie Wilson Miss Jackie
On Air Personnel GM: Teddy Long Tazz Michael Cole
Champions WWE Champion: John Cena Intercontinental Champion: Shelton Benjamin World Heavyweight Champion: Batista Women's Champion: Trish Status Tag Champions: Eddie Guerrero And Rey Mysterio
United States Champion: Inactive for reasons
Takes Place Right After WM 21
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Post by Yoshihiko The G.O.A.T on Jun 12, 2015 18:47:17 GMT -5
April 4th, 2005 Video Highlights of WrestleMania 21 are shown and followed up by Pyro as Jerry Lawler and Jim Ross introduce us to Raw. Lawler recaps last nights Pay-per-view and tells the crowds he's glad to announce that there is a new World Heavyweight Champion. Just Then Triple H's Music Hits. *Commercial* The show returns with Triple H finishing his entrance. Triple H stands in the middle of the ring while boo's and "you suck" rain on him. He talks about how this is not the beginning of a new era and that Batista was only good for one night. He then talks about how HHH vs. Batista II will happen and how he will walk out of the match an 11 time world champ.
Christian vs. Shelton Benjamin for the IC title Christian knocks down Benjamin, then Benjamin gets back up and clotheslines Christian. Christian fought back and delivered a modified neck breaker on Benjamin and goes for the pin. 1,2 but Benjamin kicked out. Sleeper hold is applied by Christian, but Benjamin fought back, but Christian hit him and went on the top rope. Benjamin caught up and was going to suplex him to the outside but Tyson Tomko nails him with a clothesline. Christian was trying to hang on, then Shelton superkicks Tomko and goes back on on the top rope and delivers a flying bulldog on and got the 1,2,3. Winner: Benjamin
*Commercial* Shawn Michael's music hits. He says that last night at WM XXI, even though he lost the WWE fans, gave him the honor and privilege to be the "show stoppa". He then says He wants a rematch with Kurt Angle and basically asked the fans if they wanted to see it and they cheered him. Shawn hits his signature pose and exits the ring.
Randy Orton is seen backstage with a doctor working on his shoulder after last nights match with the Undertaker talking about how he has no respect for Batista, thus setting up a match for later tonight.
Trish Stratus vs. Christy Hemme w/Lita for Women's Championship Trish attacks Lita and Hemme before the match starts . She throws Christy at the steel steps. Lita hit her, then Trish kicked Lita's injured leg/knee and applied a submission hold on Lita. WWE referees came to break it up.
Winner: No contest. The match never started.
*Commercial*
Batista vs. Randy Orton They lock up and Orton applied a side head lock, but Batista knocked him down. Orton suckered Batista with a European uppercut. Batista fought back with a couple of shots to the head. Orton fought back with a drop kick and Batista goes to the outside. Batista is down for a 5 count Back in the ring and Orton is still in control Orton tries to keep Batista down by delivering several shots Batista managed to gain control. Batista picks Orton up and crushes him into the corner. Batista delivered a Spinebuster, followed by the Batista bomb and got the win. Winner: Batista
Batista Stands in the middle of the ring over Orton as the show fades off.
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Post by snickelodeon on Jun 13, 2015 9:29:26 GMT -5
First off I seen your question in the help board earlier in the week asking if you can make Undertaket champion. You can do what you like but guys reading this are your audience so just be prepared for backlash if the decision doesn't make sense.
Saying that sometimes a decision that your a big fan of others may not I'm looking at DTP here but never take criticism harshly use it to make your writing stronger.
With that for a first show your Raw wasn't too bad, a bit short and the layout could do with some work but there's potential there so keep pumping out the shows then take in the constructive criticism and you could be on to a winner
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Post by AKing1979 on Jun 13, 2015 11:59:20 GMT -5
Okay beginning. I kind of don't like how Triple H seems to already be getting his rematch so soon like in real life, I felt you should build up for it down the road. The layout needs a bit more detail to it as it seems to be a bit short, and Batista apparently doesn't appear until the main event, again just like in real life.
Still it's just the first show and I'm interested to see where you go from here and how you handle Batista and Cena's title reigns.
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Post by Deleted on Jun 13, 2015 12:08:48 GMT -5
Okay, first off, this is really short. RAW during this time was two hours, this seems as if it'd be thirty minutes of television (commercials included). You have to work on that, try engaging your roster on the show. Be careful on the grammar and spelling too. Now onto the show, good opening with Triple H, but I wish this had more detail. We didn't really get a feel for Hunter's reaction from losing last night. Decent match between Christian and Benjamin, Shelton was underrated and I hope you give him a good push. Another promo that I wish had more detail, this time from Shawn Michaels. I feel like we should have gotten an answer from Kurt. The writeup for Trish vs Hemme confused me, so no comment on that. Good win for Batista, but wasn't Randy Orton a member of the Smackdown roster at this time?
You have a lot to improve on, I suggest you check out the many different diaries on the board. Study them, learn from them, and you will get better.
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Post by Deleted on Jun 13, 2015 16:55:17 GMT -5
Nice! I'm enjoyed this read I loved this era this is when I really got into WWE!
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Post by Yoshihiko The G.O.A.T on Jun 13, 2015 18:30:05 GMT -5
April 7th, 2005 the opening pyro goes off as Tazz and Michael Cole introduce us to the first Smackdown after WrestleMania 21. Tazz explains that the main event tonight will be Rey Mysterio vs. JBL. John Cena's music hits and the crowd pops instantly he runs out to the ramp and holds the WWE title up high. He gets to the ring and talks about how the champ is Finally here and no one can stop him. The familiar sound of JBL's theme cuts him off. He hops out of his limo and makes his way to the ring. He tells Cena that he is not done with him an that he will win the title come Judgment Day. Just then Orlando Jordan runs in the ring behind Cena and attacks him. JBL and Jordan continue to stomp and punch Cena until Rey Mysterio and Eddie Guerrero ran down and helped him out. The Cabinet run backstage.
Kurt Angle's music hits and he comes out to the ring bragging about how he made Shawn Michaels tap out and how he could do it to anyone. he then takes of his T-shirt and issues and open challenge *Commercial* Kurt Angle vs. Kurt Angle waits for an opponent and picks up a mic. He says that everyone in the back is scared of him and that's ok. He goes to pick up his shirt when Rob Van Dam's music comes on. He runs into the ring and Angle kicks him as soon as he enters. Van Dam recovers and connects with a spinning heel kick. The two go back forth for a while until RVD superkicks Angle and climbs to the top rope. He goes for the frog splash but angle rolls out of the way and locks in the Ankle Lock making RVD tap out. Angle spins around the ring to celebrate and then picks RVD up and Angle Slams him. Angle then walks off up the ramp and RVD lays knocked out in the middle of the ring. Winner: Kurt Angle *Commercial* Billy Kidman vs. Paul London for the Cruiserweight Title . Billy Kidman starts Punching at the bell. London battled back with chops, but Kidman hit a series of knee. London fought back with punches but London was bleeding from his head. London leapfrogged Kidman and dropkicked him in the back. The referee stopped the action, and said he wanted to check the bloody London. Referee Charles Robinson asked London if he wanted to continue, but London brushed by him to get at Kidman as he was going up the ropes. London grabbed his leg and threw Kidman off. London went for 450, but Kidman moved. London charged Kidman, who lifted him for a slam, but London rolled into small package for pin. Winner: Paul London Rey Mysterio is shown backstage getting ready for her match *Commercial* Rey Mysterio vs. JBL
JBL walks out to the ring and says Lets get this over with quick Before the match started, JBL kicked Mysterio and punched him down to the ground for a few seconds. But once the referee started the match, Mysterio surprised JBL by quickly going for a roll up. JBL barely kicked out and tackled Mysterio. They fight for a few more minutes when Rey Catches JBL with the 619. He goes for the pin when Orlando Jordan Runs In and attacks him. Winner: Rey Mysterio via DQ Eddie Guerrero runs out and him and Rey square off against The Cabinet when Teddy Longs Theme Song plays. He tells everyone that Rey And Eddie will put there tag titles up against Orlando and JBL next week on Smackdown!. Everyone in the ring grins as the show goes off.
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Post by Yoshihiko The G.O.A.T on Jun 13, 2015 18:32:52 GMT -5
Okay, first off, this is really short. RAW during this time was two hours, this seems as if it'd be thirty minutes of television (commercials included). You have to work on that, try engaging your roster on the show. Be careful on the grammar and spelling too. Now onto the show, good opening with Triple H, but I wish this had more detail. We didn't really get a feel for Hunter's reaction from losing last night. Decent match between Christian and Benjamin, Shelton was underrated and I hope you give him a good push. Another promo that I wish had more detail, this time from Shawn Michaels. I feel like we should have gotten an answer from Kurt. The writeup for Trish vs Hemme confused me, so no comment on that. Good win for Batista, but wasn't Randy Orton a member of the Smackdown roster at this time?
You have a lot to improve on, I suggest you check out the many different diaries on the board. Study them, learn from them, and you will get better. Those to parts were taken from the actual show
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Post by ✖ AJ on Jun 14, 2015 9:56:18 GMT -5
Okay, here we go. I don't like to be too tough on the new guys, so I'm gonna give you constructive criticism! *Rainbows*. The formatting should be a bit cleaner and some of the stuff is messy. Hell, take a look at some of my early shows and I was a trainwreck! Your shows do seem quite short and could use some work with that, as well as adding detail and more spacing between segments and matches... again, I don't mean to be sounding harsh but I'd like to see a new guy like yourself succeed and stick around. Good luck, bud.
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Post by Yoshihiko The G.O.A.T on Jun 14, 2015 12:25:01 GMT -5
Okay, here we go. I don't like to be too tough on the new guys, so I'm gonna give you constructive criticism! *Rainbows*. The formatting should be a bit cleaner and some of the stuff is messy. Hell, take a look at some of my early shows and I was a trainwreck! Your shows do seem quite short and could use some work with that, as well as adding detail and more spacing between segments and matches... again, I don't mean to be sounding harsh but I'd like to see a new guy like yourself succeed and stick around. Good luck, bud. Thanks man I'll work on it
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Post by Yoshihiko The G.O.A.T on Jun 14, 2015 13:38:25 GMT -5
Matthew Hyson aka Spike Dudley has recently been released from his WWE contract. WWE wishes him the best in his future endeavors.
World Wrestling Entertainment® and NBC Universal have inked a new, three-year agreement that will return WWE cable programming, including ratings titan Monday Night RAW®, to USA Network beginning in October 2005, it was announced today by Linda McMahon, WWE CEO, and Bonnie Hammer, president, USA Network and SCI FI Channel. RAW, a cable mainstay for more than 12 years, continues to be the most watched regularly scheduled year-round program on ad-supported cable television. World Wrestling Entertainment(R) reported that it drew a record attendance of 20,193 people from 14 countries and 48 states to the STAPLES Center in Los Angeles for its annual live event and Pay-Per-View pop culture extravaganza, WrestleMania 21(R). The event grossed more than $2.1 million in ticket sales, making it the highest grossing WWE event ever at STAPLES Center, and the highest grossing of the five WrestleManias held in California.
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Post by Yoshihiko The G.O.A.T on Jun 22, 2015 21:12:38 GMT -5
April 11th, 2005
The opening pryo goes off as JR and King welcome to RAW once again. They mention that Batista's first interview as champion will be tonight. They also mention Backlash Is only two weeks away.
Trish Stratus & Molly Holly v. Christy Hemme & Victoria
A video package of last weeks match between Trish and Lita is shown before Christy Hemme's Music hits. Her and Victoria walk out together. Trish comes out to boos after her actions last week. Everyone gets in the ring as the action starts. Molly and Victoria started the action off and the two exchanged hammerlocks before Molly got the fireman's carry and took Victoria down. Victoria countered into a arm-drag before. Victoria then hit a moon-sault but only managed to get a two count on the cover.
Christy was tagged in and landed a few kicks before getting a scoop slam and going for a cover for a one count. Molly tossed Hemme into the ropes and Trish caught her with a leg before being tagged in. Trish threw her into the ropes and then climbed the ropes and choked Christy from the top turnbuckle.
Once she descended she tagged Molly in and landed a baseball slide drop kick. She covered for a two count but Christy kicked out. Christy then was put in a half Boston crab before she eventually fought out of it and tagged in Victoria.
Victoria came in with a reverse elbow and two clotheslines before landing a high back body drop. Victoria then went for the widow's peak but molly whipped Victoria into the ropes but was met with a kick.
Christy was tagged in and landed some stiff shots before Trish interfered again and turned the momentum. Molly slung Christy into the corner and went for a somersault splash but missed. The shot knocked Trish off the apron and Christy sneaked up on the groggy Holly and rolled her up for the victory. Winner: Christy Hemme and Victoria After the match Kane's music hits ad he chases Trish backstage.
**********Commercial***********
JR then recapped Orton's shoulder injury from a collision with the post in his match with World Heavyweight Champion Batista last week. He said that he'd have a major announcement regarding the injury later that night.
Triple H's music hit the arena to tremendous heat. JR announced Triple H as the #1 contender for the World Heavyweight Championship and King put over the fact he couldn't get used to the fact that Triple H wasn't champion. Triple H told Batista to enjoy his first interview as World Heavyweight Champion and that the rematch had been signed. He says that he has found a weakness in Batista and that is the Pedigree. He went on saying that the Pedigree was the truth and that Batista made the biggest mistake of his life... Screwing with him. He talks about how instead of getting his rematch he wrestles masked freaks and midgets.
The Hurricane's music cuts him off and the Hurricane makes his way to the ring. He talks about how the last time Triple H was in action he was wearing a mask too.. A Crimson mask. He points to the Tron as this picture comes up
Triple H the attacks the Hurricane as a ref ran in the ring to make the match official.
**********Commercial**********
Hurricane v. Triple H
The Show continues as Triple H has a front face lock on Hurricane. He throws him to the ropes and attempts a clothesline but Hurricane ducks then bounces off the ropes and hits a dropkick.
He goes for a pin but Triple H kicks out at one. He lifts Triple H up and bounces off the ropes again in an attempt to do another dropkick put Triple H reverses and hits Hurricane with the Spinebuster. He picks him up and goes for the Pedigree when Batista's music comes on He makes his way slowly down the ramp and holds the belt up. Hurricane gets up and hits Triple H with the Eye Of The Hurricane and pins him.
Winner: The Hurricane
Chris Masters v. Seth Skyfire Chris Masters comes out and gets ready for his match against OVW wrestler Seth Skyfire. Seth Skyfire makes his way to the ring and the match starts.
Right away Chris Masters clotheslines Skyfire and the suplexs him. He then grabs him and throws him into the Master Lock. Seth passes out and Masters throws him to the ground. Winner Winner: Chris Masters Afterwards Chris Masters says next week the Master Lock Challenge returns.
**********Commercial********** During this break the 2005 Diva Search commercial airs.
Highlight Reel with Chris Jericho
Jericho introduced the WWE Intercontinental Champion, Shelton Benjamin as his guest tonight. He addressed Shelton Benjamin, saying he had something to say to his face. Shelton then walked out. Jericho said that he wanted to get the intercontinental championship back. helton put over the fact that hes had the belt for six months and that theres a reason hes held it that long. He also said he was the best pure athlete in the WWE. Jericho then insulted Shelton for holding the title for six whole months. Shelton then came back saying that he was a better pure athlete then anyone in the WWE. Jericho then asked Benjamin if he can shove the belt up his ass. Shelton said he's not sure, but he can use his fist to create more hits than the last Fozzy album. Jericho asked if he heard of their latest song, "Shelton is a Bitch." They got in a shoving match, which led the two into a brawl which after a brief scuffle, was broken up by the officials. After Jericho is brought backstage Benjamin gets ready for his non title rematch against Christian
Shelton Benjamin v. Christian
Christian makes his way to the ring and is accompanied by Tomko. Benjamin and Christian exchange blows for a few minutes and then Shelton connects with a German suplex. He picks him up and throws him outside the ring. Chris Jericho rolls out from under the ring wearing Christian's trunks. He climbs into the ring slowly as if he was injured. Shelton picks him up thinking he is Christian and Chris Jericho goes for the Codebreaker. he then pins Benjamin and rolls out of the ring holding his face. Winner: Christian*
**********Commercial********** We came back to JR standing in the ring as he introduced the World Heavyweight Champion, Batista who came out to a good pop. Batista talked about Triple H saying he wanted to pedigree him earlier in the night. He said he was all set in his gear just so it was easier for him. When asked about the rematch he said he wasnt worried at all. He talked about knowing that he would be the guy everyone was after as soon as he won the World Championship, but he refused to be anyone's victim. He put over the fact that hes the man now and just as much a carnivore as the rest of the guys on the roster. He said if anyone thought about trying to take his title, that he could chew them up, spit them out and enjoy doing it. He said that if Triple H was looking in his eyes and seeing feat he wondered if Triple H was just seeing a reflection of himself. He said he would never be a ten-time world champ, only a one-time world champion and that he wouldnt lose the strap. Batista then soaked up some feint cheers when Hunters music hit the ring. Batista stood in the ring and was blindsided by Triple H who tried to hit him with a quickly loaded pedigree. Batista countered with a back body drop over the top rope. Hunter stumbled backwards looking on at the ring while JR held up Batistas hand and pointed at Triple H. Triple H grabbed the mic and said he was going to face JR next week on Raw. The show ended with JR definitely looking shaken.
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Post by ✖ AJ on Jun 24, 2015 11:16:08 GMT -5
Stating Raw off with Diva's action at this time period would be odd to see. Having Christy and Victoria win was fine... we have the Kane stalker stuff with Trish, but it wasn't elaborated on. Triple H's promo probably should have opened the show... The Hurricane interrupting him was interesting and, to be honest, I really don't like him getting a lucky win over HHH. I also think at the least, HHH should have beat the crap out of him with a hammer. How can he look that legitimate with Batista when he is losing to the likes of The Hurricane? Anyway, moving on, we get Chris Masters winning a squash and that was fine for him. Solid stuff with The Highlight Reel. SHELTON SHELTONS A LIL BITCH! Having Jericho use the Codebreaker doesn't work here when he didn't start using it until 2007, just a small note. Weird finish to the match but it was cool I suppose... we got the closing promo already? The show seemed short and I'd think HHH would be more pissed after his upset loss earlier on... now he is challenging JR to a match next week? I dunno. I know you're just getting in to this but the shows thus far have seemed short and have had a lot of questionable decisions. I'll still keep reading and giving this a chance, but stuff still needs tweaking.
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Post by Yoshihiko The G.O.A.T on Jun 24, 2015 11:34:39 GMT -5
Stating Raw off with Diva's action at this time period would be odd to see. Having Christy and Victoria win was fine... we have the Kane stalker stuff with Trish, but it wasn't elaborated on. Triple H's promo probably should have opened the show... The Hurricane interrupting him was interesting and, to be honest, I really don't like him getting a lucky win over HHH. I also think at the least, HHH should have beat the crap out of him with a hammer. How can he look that legitimate with Batista when he is losing to the likes of The Hurricane? Anyway, moving on, we get Chris Masters winning a squash and that was fine for him. Solid stuff with The Highlight Reel. SHELTON SHELTONS A LIL BITCH! Having Jericho use the Codebreaker doesn't work here when he didn't start using it until 2007, just a small note. Weird finish to the match but it was cool I suppose... we got the closing promo already? The show seemed short and I'd think HHH would be more pissed after his upset loss earlier on... now he is challenging JR to a match next week? I dunno. I know you're just getting in to this but the shows thus far have seemed short and have had a lot of questionable decisions. I'll still keep reading and giving this a chance, but stuff still needs tweaking. The funny part is the Divas match and the JR thing are actually from the real episode xD thanks for the reply and ill work on it
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Post by snickelodeon on Jul 5, 2015 8:25:54 GMT -5
I didn't mind Hurricane interrupting HHH but Hurricane should never be pinning HHH especially heading into a World title match, I understand why you did it and it's an easy way to progress a rivalry but shouldn't have went that way. HHH should have won and then nodding to the Crimson mask HHH should have busted open Helms.
End of Raw was better but it still defied some logic but it was good to leave the show with a cliffhanger and build for next weeks show.
Rest of the show was fine, you still need to work on your layout and I'm not a fan of the mixed colours but if you keep pumping out shows you will get better and better.
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