DWF episode 1

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this is episode one of my Pic fed domination wrestling federation
dwfpicfed.proboards.com/index.cgi?action=display&board=general&thread=1
just tell me what you think and I will make episode 2 when I find time

[Squatch]

Hey masspick! The show was somewhat weak I think because of the poses I mean it was nothing special or great but I think it needs a lot of work and that you can work on your poses more than anything! Good luck in the future with DWF!

[Deleted]

I actually think you had a lot of good poses. I wouldn't worry about that, your poses were good. Everything else about the presentation is what needs work. No turnbuckles? The commentary is a bit screwy and needs to be fine tuned. I like some aspect of the arena, but you need to make it feel a bit more like an arena. I think a little work on that could go a long way.

Not sure what's going on with the moonsault spot, seems kinda repeated, but overall it's a start. Work on establishing a bit more character development, fine tune things a bit and make the matches mean more.

[tirva]

Not a bad first start, everybody has to start somewhere. Take sometime before you shoot the next show and think of what you could make and do to make this next show better. Backstage set? Backgroud to the ring? How can you make your ring and entrance look better? Grab some ideas from a dollar store for a cheap way to improve things. Then how can you make the presentation a bit better. You did a decent job to begin. Think of who you want to build your fed around and go from there.

Looking forward to seeing how much better episode #2 is!

[deskjet]

Dec 20, 2010 10:53:45 GMT -5 tirva said:

Not a bad first start, everybody has to start somewhere. Take sometime before you shoot the next show and think of what you could make and do to make this next show better. Backstage set? Backgroud to the ring? How can you make your ring and entrance look better? Grab some ideas from a dollar store for a cheap way to improve things. Then how can you make the presentation a bit better. You did a decent job to begin. Think of who you want to build your fed around and go from there.

Looking forward to seeing how much better episode #2 is!

I'm gonna take the easy way out and say this is good advice

[The Warsman]

Alright, first show!

Well, the positives are I could see your enthusiasm and effort, and both are very good. I liked the pacing of the first match and the camera shots were (for the most part) really pretty good. Your poses were alright and will get better with time. There are some things to work on for next time if you really want to improve.

I'd suggest:

Filling in a backstory for the matches, or maybe at least some promos or vignettes so we know why they are fighting. The commentary just didn't "sell us" on why they are having matches.

Work on your arena. You canvas is filthy (sorry dude!) and the missing turnbuckles look ghetto. Plus, the big 'ol knots tying your ropes together is ugly. I'm not sure what happened with the MSG print out I made, but they shouldn't be that small. Those look sized for the Micro Aggression line!!

Solid first show effort, hope you stick with it and hone your skills a bit more!

Thanks for sharing!

Wars

[britishinvasion]

You really need to look at some of the others who put together nice setups, Warsman and Bigeviljohn come to mind on how to setup a Boss arena. Work on getting an entranceway and background first, then maybe plan and try a rough draft of your matches before you actually shoot them. Also please get some turnbuckles, what happened to the ones that came with the ring? Keep posting and you will get better for sure.

[Deleted]

thanks for the advice I will take it all into account I understand your complaint for the no story behind the matches but this is due to the fact I that I want you guys to see a full begining and again I thank you all I wil try and improve as much as possible for episde 2

[(=wwefan617=)]

I am glad to see a pic fed newcomer. =) Hopefully the show is good!

Things are starting off very quickly, I see. It is time for the first contest already. I was hoping for a longer introduction, but we'll let the matches do the talking.

Angle versus Orton is a good way to get things started. I'm sure these guys will put on a great match... That match was pretty good. It had some solid poses and exciting action. The spot where Angle fails the moonsault was very well done.

One match straight to the next huh? I was hoping for a backstage segment, interview, or update on Kurt's condition. Let's see is Taker and Triple H can top that last contest... I enjoyed this match, but not as much as I did the opener. This match had some interesting hardcore action, but the posing was not as good as the posing in the first contest. Glad to see The Game come out on top though.

Main event time! Punk and Kane should tear the house down... That match went well. You did a good job at capturing both of their styles. I always like it when a big man encounters a smaller opponent. You captured that dynamic quite well. I'm also glad that Punk captured the championship. Good job.

Overall, this was not bad for a first show. Here a few suggestions: Get a cleaner setup; work on your poses (some are a bit stiff); film some backstage segments/interviews; and resize your photos (they are way too big). If you do these things, I guarantee that your next show will be even better. Good job for a first. Keep it up. =)

[Byron F'N Saxton Fan]

Finally felt like making the pics compatible for my Screen, so I watched the show throughout, for a change.

Overall thoughts were the poses were good, but not what they should be for a show. You showed some talent, as I mentioned, so just work on the poses to make them look as realistic as possible, and see if you can't figure out a better way for Ariel moves to be shot, because the way they were made it obvious you held them. The lighting was good and I liked the Entrance Way, as it wasn't just "DWF" in Pencil, it had colors and looked like a nice logo on the Set. Maybe find something to block out the "extra" stuff you have laying around, as was shown in one pic from the Apron, or just make sure that stuff is out of the way during the show.

The commercials seemed out of place since you would take one and come back with things having progressed by one picture, for example, Triple H has the Table in the Ring, commercial, the Table is set-up as we come back from commercial. I like to use the commercial out to shorten my Matches, but if you're going to use them, do it when you can cut out a sequence of getting back in the Ring, or something like that, as opposed to Orton being on the Outside the entire commercial break, the same place he was when we last saw him. Resize the pictures, because they were awfully big and forced me to watch the show in a Zoom Level I couldn't read the Commentary in. Get a Referee, even if it's just a guy in a shirt and Pants, so that way things have more of a realism factor, as opposed to the Wrestlers fighting alone and being declared winners by Invisible people.

Good show, and hopefully as you progress in some of the ways mentioned above, we'll learn about and get to know the fierce competitors in DWF more.