The Debut World Wrestling Episode 1

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www.brokenep1.webs.com

I hope you guys enjoy this show, it really took me alot of effort and alot of hard work and time to make this show so show your respect and view my show and please leave a decent reply.

Thanks and enjoy

[easy1986]

Been lookin forward to this for a long time. It was a well rounded first show to be honest. Its so hard to develope fueds through one show but you managed to do it. The poses were solid and the match length's were to. I felt that the promo work was a little lacking and commentary wasnt the best but still okay. In the Hass burke match though I got kinda frustrated because you didnt do any of Burke's Signature moves, that kinda made me upset. 2 4 corners matches in a row was a little blah. Instead of rushing 4 acts out there I thought you should have done some work with atleast one of the singles competitors and 2 of your tag-teams. The mainevent though was very enjoyable and Im glad that you refer to Edge and Chritian as "brothers". I hope that goes some where, because you took the time to make a segment of it-or maybe it was to establish Cage as heel and Edge as face. Also Heyman as a play by play guy is kinda like having JR do color commentary, it just doesnt feel right. GREAT SOLID START, hopefully this sticks.

[That guy next door.]

Match 1 - Charlie Hass vs Burke? Never heard of either of them but they both seem vaguely familiar lol. Loving that arena setup. The poses in this match are rather hit/miss imo. I'm not trying to knock you down it's just i feel that a few were a bit stiff whereas the rest were exceptional. The string used poses were amazing here, some of your best work. (I've searched for your previous work). I was a little confused by the ending though. Did he dropkick him and land under him so he decided to go for the rollup?

Segment 1 - So it's gonna be Brock and Edge tonight? Sweet. Wodner who Edge has as his backup?

Match 2 - Punk vs Y2J vs Muhammed Hassan vs Randy Orton? Man i am looking forward to this, how do you put photoshopped pictures on a direct upload from webs? (The fireworks ones). Hey! What the Hell is the 4RIW CW title doing in your fed?!?! Lol. Teaming up on Orton? I wonder why? That guillotine pose was amazing imo. Pepsi plunge? Amazing pose there. Punk wins! Punk wins! Man, i need to stop reading wwe.com so much.

Segment 2 - What the hell was that attack all about? I'm sure we will find out.

Match 3 - 8 man tag? Sweet. Man i need to buy me the figures from that match. All i have is RA32 Morrison for all 8! Wow! I'm speechless after watching that. Incredible! Cage and Tomko as champs? Well, i'm all outta fresh ideas for who Edge's backup is. Not Rated Y2J, not Rated RKO, not E&C, so who?

Segment 3 - Hmmmm.... Can't decide whether you want Punk heel or face. He's got face attitude but heel actions so to speak.

Segment 4 - Hahaha!!!! I have no idea why but i am in hysterics at this segment!!!

Match 4 - Like the TNA esque promo at the beginning. Mind if i use that? Loving the 1/500 belt use. When my Hardyz exclusive arrives the World title is recieving an IC makeover. Man i need a Brock figure! Love the fireworks and cameras effet there! Brilliant pyro work on Edge's entrance! Oh wow! What a suplex. Loving the ringskirts btw. Nap's? Wait! Tables! No! F5! Again with the no! What the hell!?!?! OMG WHAT A POWERSLAM! There both out surely! No! Brock to the rescue! 2 Ladders! Man i wish i had 2 DA ladders. Spear!!!!! Goung to the outside? More tables!!! What a con-chair-to! Ouch! He's busted open! Dreamer! Tommy FN Dreamer! God the attire is hilarious though! Oh my! What a decapitation! What a bloody mess Brock is! Man that was action packed.

Overall: A brilliant show. Better than what i could do in 6 months!

I wish i could work with someone like you or Slash to help get 4RIW off the ground. Or DJ, because i love all your work. Heck, i love most peoples, you're just the ones i wanted to work with most because i am inspired more.

Loving the naparo skirts there.

Man i suck at pic fedding.

[deskjet]

Welcome back kind sir. Opening match there were some decent string poses, however you need to work on transitional shots from one pose to the next. Superstar match was really good. Lots of action, some better poses. Decent backstage segments to move things along. Great hype for the Main event. Some really solid poses. Well executed swerve at the end.

Overall, a good debut. transitional poses need some work as well as some better commentary/ Good havin ya back on board:)

[hCo.Bro™ [brandon_lee]]

Lets see here...

- First things first, the commentary. I think when commentary is saved as the last "task" before completing a show, it tends to get rushed through to finish the product. Now I dont know what your procedure is or anyones for that matter, just my assumption. I honestly dont know how different the grammer is with the U.K. and the U.S., but there are certian points that I would like to think are similar. Like for instance, capitalization. There where a few words here and there that should have been and of course, werent. Most noticably "Broken" when referenced as your show/brand and a few spots with your superstar's names. The segments with Brock and CM Punk came across a bit off to me. Brock should come off as a pretty intense guy weither he is heel or face. My point: "Brock: Cheers man but iam sure its nothing i can handle, but thanks for the heads up." would have came across more Lesnar-esqe if he had said : "Thanks for the heads up, but it doesnt suprise that Edge would have something up his sleeve. He can bring whoever he wants to, Ill just have to break them in half too. That belt is as good as mine and nothings going to stand in my way." followed by a pic of Lesnar walking off and another of Dreamer watching. Catch my drift? Watch some "Soaps" and learn about drama lol. Now the CM Punk comment. He says that he would of never thought he win his first match and be champion or something like that. Come on, he's CM Punk heel or face he would drop a "Im straight edge, and Im better than you." line. Its easy to put words in someones mouth, but try to work on projecting it as "so and so" would say. Edge and Christians segment flowed better for me and I did too like the "brother" connection. A lot said and I dont want to come across as nit-picking, but if your going to add dialogue, its got to flow or it can lower the shows quality no matter how nice of pictures you take or how cool you bedazzle them with graphics.

-I dont guess I have as much to say about the poses than whats already been said. I would like to point out what DJ said about "transitional" poses/pictures. You have Haas going to slam Burkes head into the turnbucke. You take a picture of him holding his head and say thats what hes doing. All this spot needed was one more picture of the impact. A suplex should be three pictures long. The set up, the lift, the impact. I know you may say "well ive already taken 43,243,553 pics" Of what? People putting a ringskirt on?

I respect the hell out of you for putting out a show and hope you keep them coming. I can only imagine how tiresome it can get putting one togather and only get rewarded for a hand full of replies that vary in length and needed criticism. Take it for what its worth, and I hope you dont get mad and "hoot and holler" "quit and spit" (I have cows too, alive and well.) lol, It was a good show, always room for improvement no matter who you are and I like to try to spark alittle fire under your rear end to try to keep you motivated. Looking forward to the next one.


Am I the only one who has noticed that no one has spelt Charlie Haas' name right? L, its wrote out on the back of the figures a$$ for heavens sake!



Cheap plug...There are a lot, A LOT, of shows im behind on...I cant say ill reply to them all (if youve had multiple since your last response from me) but ill try to hit up your most recent ones sometime this weekend! Hang with me.

[unionjack]

great show man i really enjoyed it

i enjoyed the matches

hass v burke
i really liked the slice kick pose
i like your arena
the Spingboard suplex pose was awesome
i really enjoyed this match
the commentary was good

great job .

cool segment hmmm i think dreamer is something evolved in this assistance .

y2g v hassan v cm punk v randy orton
i love the fireworks graphic for randy orton's entrance
the springboard senton pose was great it looked awesome
and the Lionsault pose was also great
the pepsi plunge was awesome
i really liked this match
good job man .

intresting segment i wonder why hass and chavo atacked burke hmmmmm i hope burke get's sylvester terkay to help him .

8 man tag for tag belts
awesome Running STO and Dragon suplex combo pose i liked it alot .
i loved the huge headbutt pose
i really liked this match
the poses were good
i can sense that cage and tomko may have fued with the dudleys here
good job .

cool segment i like the name of the belt
it sounds original .

cool segment i smell a brother against brother storyline here.

awesome promo

edge v lesnar
that was awesome when lesnar suplexed edge onto the floor outside.
thta powerslam pose was great , poor edge he's gotta be dead
oh god brock's got ladders lol
oh no tommy was lying he's the outside help
i loved the huge splash pose
edge is the champ!.

awesome match
i really enjoyed the show
i like the segments and the commentary
good job man

i can't wait to see what brock will do to dreamer and edge .

great job .

[(=wwefan617=)]

hey buddy! it's time for me to reply to this show. so i have decided to try out a new replying technique. i will have on paragraph for the cons of the show and one paragraph for the pros. I'm sure it's been done before, but i haven't seen many people doing it like that soooo... here we go. I'll start with the cons so we can end with the positive feedback.

CONS:

OK when i got to the bottom of the first page i was disappointed to see that there were no next links =( i think next links are very important because your viewer doesn't have to go through the hassle of returning to the top of the page to go to the next segment. just something to think about for the next show. One thing I would work on for your next show is the dialogue. it seems like you are using some terms that wrestlers would not use. lol it's like everyone is English. i highly doubt Brock would say "cheers". so just keep an eye out for stuff like that. another thing that i am not a fan of at all is the positioning of your camera. it's a tad too high. the angle makes your ring look ridiculously large. much like some poses i do in my ring make it look too small. it all depends on how you position the camera. that's all the cons from my point of view. now onto the pros!

PROS:

OK so here were the main pros for this show (in my opinion) 1. posing. all of the poses were great and i could make out every single move that you were portraying with the figures. keep doing what you are doing with your poses. try new ways to do certain moves and you will only get better as time goes on. keep it up with that =) 2. presentation. the presentation for this show was very well done. you know how big i am on presentation, and you showed just how good you are at that with this show. while i am not a fan of the big ring, i love the color scheme and ring-skirts you have going on. the fireworks and pyros were on point as well. great job adding those effects in. i wish i was good at that. i might fool around with GIMP later to see if i can do something along those lines. story lines were another strong point in this show. i see things are moving along and that is difficult to do in the first show. the card was well done too. all of the matches were rigged for greatness. the contrast of fighting styles made every match fun to watch. just keep things going man. i hope this fed sticks. (I'm sure it will)

oh yeah and glad you used "wwefan format". take care man. i look forward to your next show.

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Cheers for all of your replys thus far guys. I will take all the tips in with me when i do the next show. Wwefan, you will have to show me how to do the next link.

[That guy next door.]

Me too on the link thingy. LMB, i think it's at the top of the page. Click the link button. And you can probably put an image up that when you click on it links through.

[Dat guy ova der]

Ok... I really like this debut. It was a very solid show.

My only complaints have really already been covered, but I'll try to add to them.

Poses - basically, all has been covered. You have nice poses, but it seemed as though you were missing half of them. They would go from standing, to mid-move, to getting up way too quick. I hope you know what I mean.

Commentary - I can't seem to figure out how to do good commentary, so I'm not really one to talk, but I didn't really like the commentary. One way you could make it better to me, is running it through a spell check before putting it up. There were many typos, and misspellings that made it seem messy. Another suggestion is to not use abrieviations in commentary. It really bugged me to see Mr. Perfect using things like "OMG" and "FFS".



I know I may sound like a dick, but I'm only being critical because you had a really good show. When you have a show that good, I think you will take all the help you can get. Your not far from having an amazing fed here, but those small things really bug me.


any chance at a reply for my show?

[dmallett4]

right.

your arena looks nice, and the presentation is also nice. urgh, dont use abbreviations in the commentary, its stupid. yeah, you spelt haas wrong. good to see some elijah burke. you cheaped out on having no backdrop pose. your senton pose was nice however. im a bit dissapointed you didnt have burke hitting the elijah express, after all haas was set up for it... no next link? just post the page link in, its better than having to go to the top of the page again. pretty odd backstage segment, why would dreamer help brock? punk/jericho should be nice. oh wait, its a four way? hopefully jericho goes over. the hurricarana spot was cool. punk winning is interesting. weird backstage segment, haas is beating him down because he lost? alright.... id rather you had some tournaments for some titles, instead of multi man matches. the sto/dragon supolex pose was really nice. i quite like that tomko/christian are tag champs. it was a nice match, the best so far tonight, had a lotof action, and wasnt clustered. face punk? meh, hes better as a heel. so is christian a face? or is edge the face? seems a bit confusing. pretty nice promo. id of like to of seen it in a video though. your effects are quite nice. i really liked the superplex pose. urgh, i hate your blood effects, get some halloween blood or something. dreamer looks incredibly stupid. im glad edge went over, i hate that dreamer was the one to help him though. afterall, edge was in control, and didnt really need any help.

it was an alright show, overall id it give it ***. i actually preferred your old fed, this just seems to wwe'ish to me.

[shiftyeyes]

Need to comment on this Will edit.

[wwfepenguin]

Match 1: Solid opener, nice to see some low card guys, having some time.

seg 1: What does Edge got planed?

Match 2: My favorite of the night, saw a lot of hard nice action, I like Punk as the champ, (I'm a Punk mark) what did orton and y2j do? i saw them brawl.

seg 2: Same thing as match 1.

Match 3: Another solid contest, MNM got out quick, don't screw them up ( plz don't make them jobbers.) I'm glad the frencheis didn't win, i just can't stand those guys. Pulling for dudleys, but i like cc and tomko as champs.

seg 3: Is punk heel or face? I can't tell. I think face, but still.

seg 4. Edge and cc seem to have bro prombles.

Match 4. Brock Lensar vs Edge, great main event, Tommy Dreamer??? That @$$. O well Edge is a good choice.

I really enjoyed your show, nice poses, like other people said don't use OMG that looks odd, and watch for typos.

A great debut, can't wait for more!

[gazwefc]

Enjoyed the show matey, only thing i didnt like was the blood but if thats the only thing i have to say i didnt like then you did a great job, liked the backstage segs and the matches were done well with plenty of pics, Im not a fan of Punk so lets hope he loses the title soon, Delighted that Christian won with Tomko but id like to see him go into singles and beat CM Punk! look forward to the next show

[Deleted]

How do you make the fireworks? please help me