FDS 21/03/07: Say Cheese

[Calvin]

Flashes are everywhere. They light up the sky with blinding rays. Clicks are heard from all directions as the flashes continue. Looking around, to see the ocean in front. Sparking through the blinding lights is the water. Looking further down to see the beach front. The sand is not to rocky, as the grades are extremely soft. In the sand are two buckets, one is fill with the sand from the beach, and the other is up side down. They are right beside a pile of sand, but these piles are in the shape of the buckets. There are four of them, in a square kind of shape. There are barricades that connect the two piles of sand. Obviously this is a sand castle. There is a person beside the sand castle. It seems to be a girl. She’s all oiled down, from head to toe. These flashes reflect off of her oily body as she lays in the sand, with a little green shovel in hand. Wearing a two piece bathing suit, she gives off a ear to ear smile. She smiles with each flash. Looking behind, the mystery of where these flashes are coming from are solved. Cameras. Cameras all around. There are three or four of them surrounding the girl. It is then noticed that this is not a beach at all. Looking around to see that this is instead just a big computerized image of the ocean behind the girl, and she’s just in a small area covered with beach sand. She repositions herself with each picture taken from the camera as a guy calls out different terms like “great” and “amazing.” There in the distance, behind a curtain that separates this studio from other ones is Calvin Lee. Calvin Lee is talking to someone as he watches the pictures being taken. He grins.


Calvin Lee: You know Luther, this is the perfect job. The perfect job for a women of great physique. She can model on the beach, or anywhere and she always will know that she will be paid as long as she doesn’t lose her look. Any women can do this, if they are thin. All they have to do is work out, and look great. Eat healthy, exercise everyday, and just look great. They don’t need to do anything else in their life, but smile for the camera. This is the kind of job that will have you reeling in the big bucks passed the age of 65. You don’t have to worry because with this job, you’re pension will be amazingly large. Yes, this is the perfect job for any women.


Luther Castle: I have to agree. And you can never get tired of looking at pretty women in magazines.


Calvin Lee: Exactly. So why wouldn’t a girl want to have this job. If they can take it, if they get the chance, why don’t they take it. Why do good looking girls always take the jobs that need hard working independents rather then taking the easy way out and just looking good? It just doesn’t make sense to me.


Luther Castle: I guess some girls just don’t have the brains.


Calvin Lee: I agree. I mean, we have just one female on the WFWF roster right now. Why? Because all the women we had realized that they can make it through life so much easier if they just smile for the camera. Yes, we have like no female wrestlers. None, except for one. Mia Porter.


Luther Castle: Why doesn’t she realize she can make it too. She looks great? Why ruin such a great body with professional wrestling?


Calvin Lee: That is a question only she can answer. Maybe she’s just not smart. Maybe she thinks she’s fat. Maybe she thinks more money comes through wrestling. Maybe she thinks being a female wrestler gives her an advantage because she’s a girl. Maybe she just doesn’t know. But I can tell you, she picked the wrong profession. She should have stayed out of professional wrestling.

Luther Castle: Why is that?



Calvin Lee: Because she is up against Calvin Lee now. No one has been able to show her the true way of her life. Her meaning in life isn’t to wrestle. It may be one of her dreams but it’s not her true dream.


I know the truth Mia. You’re angry. You were turned down by this society and you’re angry. You couldn’t make it in the real world. You just couldn’t cut it. So you came to the WFWF to take that anger away. Well I have news for you. You’ll just fail here. Girls cant make it in the WFWF. Just ask one of the greats. Meg. She was defeating guys week in and week out. Then she had a mental break down and her mom died. It’ll happen to you too Mia. So I’m gonna save you before that can happen. I’ll free you.


Luther Castle: Yes, she doesn’t belong here.


Calvin Lee: She needs to be in a profession where she is safe and secure. Somewhere where she knows she can’t be hurt. Like a modeling job. The only thing that can happen is if she starts to become anorexic. But only dumb ass models like celebrities have that happen to them. Mia’s smart, she’ll make the right choice.


Luther Castle: Yes, modeling jobs are the jobs women like Mia were made for.


Calvin Lee: Yes. They don’t belong in wrestling rings. Maybe if they were posing for pictures, but not to be up against future champions like Calvin Lee.


Luther Castle: Plus they are fun to look at.


Calvin Lee: Haha, I suppose. I remember when I was in the Anointed. That’s all EBR would ever look at. It’s because that’s all he could get.


Luther Castle: Hahaha, the girls don’t like him?


Calvin Lee: Nah, there were rumours that he was gay, that’s all.


Luther Castle: I see.


Calvin Lee: Mmhmm, I’m sure everyone knew about it. But I guess that’s what back stabbing bastards get eh? Damn bastard only ever thought of money. Probably wanted to give it to charity of something. You know that’s what he did with all the money he won in those bets we did?
Luther Castle: Really?



Calvin Lee: Yes that’s why he’s rumoured to be returning. I bet he’ll take all his earnings and donate it to charity. Dumb ass. I’m sure he’ll like bet against me in every match too. Because I know in his heart he didn’t want me in the Anointed. He just didn’t think I could cut it, that’s why he ran away from me and left me dry when Alex Sean left the WFWF. He didn’t see the true talent in Calvin Lee like you do.


But oh well, it’s his problem not mine. He thinks he can return? Hah, he’ll last a month. He always does. And he’ll see my true talent when I face Mia Porter. Mia will be my proof to EBR. The proof that I am talented and for real. If after I face Mia he still thinks I’m talent less I’ll have to show him one on one. Then he’ll realize just who Calvin Lee is.


Luther Castle: Yes, you are talented. It’s too bad no one in WFWF can see it. But don’t worry, that’s why I am here. To help change that. To fix the WFWF. To show them true talent. To let them feel my wrath.


Calvin Lee: First is Mia though. Once I get through Mia, and prove to EBR my skills, we’ll take on the tag team champions. We will be champions in no time. Now lets get out of here before I start seeing what they put on the next issue of this magazine.


Luther Castle: Agreed, lets go.


Calvin Lee and Luther start to walk away, as the curtain waves. The flashing continues into darkness.

[Calvin]

not too much of Lee's thoughts in this rp, but oh well. I tried to the right idea out, that girls belong in magazines and not wfwf rings....I really don't believe that for real though. Just so you all know...I'M NOT SEXIST!

Would love to hear what you all think though.

[sonstuds]

Good general base idea all around. Sadly, you took an idea of being a chauvinistic jerk whenever I faced a girl.

The description was kind of annoying, just in the sense you have a bit of a habit of creating an element of surprise when there shouldn't be. I mean, you mention flashes, then by the end of the description reveal it's a camera.You shouldn't bother doing that unless it's something more interesting and less obvious.

One thing I see that could potentially be a problem is the dialogue between Calvin and Luther. You may be doing this anyways, so this might not even apply. Last week you had a reason to not have much communication coming from Luther, but this week he mainly just agrees with whatever Calvin is saying or is a quick segway into something else. I think if you really want to expand both of them you need to start developing a bit more of a personality with Luther. Right now, there's really not much of a character with him.

Overall, good roleplay sir.

[CBT]

I agree with EBR in the sense, you had good structure and good direction on this. It just was slightly annoying how it seemed you and Castle kind of repeated the same crap over and over. Not about "modeling is the perfect job for women, but at times when it seemed you were going word for word and not really drawing much more form it.
Still I thought the speech was good, but Castle came off as Anointed member Calvin Lee. In that sense I mean a tag alone. He is still coming off as a yes man, and I don't know if that can do you much good, if you both aren't strong as seperate entities who teamed up.
All and all though, you said you had a idea and this was well executed, much better then any hall of shame, grand theft mailbox, and about even with your trip to the muesem. So yea, I enjoyed reading it and I'm pretty sure Mia will enjoy it aswell.
Good luck