What an exciting time. FDS RP

[hardyz]

I am the High Horror. I am at Heinz Field. It is a bright sunny day. There are people all around. Fat people with hot dogs. Drunks with Miller Light. So much camotion. Little kids at their first game. Old people at their 20th. But what do all of these people and me have in common? We are all football fans.

Horror:Oh, I had better get to my seat. The game will soon begin.

So I get to my seat. I cannot wait to see the Steelers match up against the Giants. However almost like lightning, the first quarter is over. Steelers ahead 17-9. I go to get a drink, and who do I run into. None other than Marc Thibodeux. He was my old tag team partner in the UWA.

Mark:Hey Horror, what is up?

Horror:Nothing. Just came to a game to get my mind off of my upcoming match.

Mark:Yeah, I read something about that. You are in a Fatal 4-Way, correct?

Horror:Correct.

Sports Announcer: TOUCHDOWN GIANTS!!!

Horror:Damn. Anyway I have never faced that many people at once. I am at a big disadvantage.

Mark: No you are not. You are the best. You are a 3 time UWA champ. 1 time UWA Tag Team champ. And I do not know how many titles you won in Hoyales. Although I know nothing about your opponents, their is a big doubt in my mind that they can beat someone like that. Plus you are ruthless. Remember Matt?

Actually I do. I have not thought about that in a long time. I remember the last time I saw him, I paralyzed him. But I do not wish to recall those memories.

Horror:Anyway, see you later, I want to get back to the game.

Mark:Ok. Good luck in your match.

Horror:Thanks, but you said I could beat anyone.

Little did I know at that point is that I would need all of the luck I could get. All of those titles are good. But they mean nothing if you cannot win. But I will not worry about that now.

End of the 1st half. Steelers 27. Giants 26.

(cell phone rings)

Horror:Hello?

Matt:Hello.

Horror:Matt, dude, I have not heard from you in a few years. Not since the accident.

Matt:I do not consider it an accident. Mark called me and told me everything. Dude, get this off of your chest. I forgive you. It was all because of me being an ass. So go out there and beat those punks within an inch of their lives!

(hangs up phone)

Wow. That was unexpected. But now at least that is one less thing on my mind.

End of 3rd quarter. Giants are ahead 39-32

This day is an almost great day. If only the Steelers would win. Oh well time to go get a hot dog.
While I am standing in line, I feel a tug on the back of my coat. It is a little boy.

Horror:Hello little boy, do you need something?

Kid:Ya....I hate those guys you are going up against. Beat them to a pulp.

The kid runs away and I go to my seat thinking who that kid is. Then I realize. That is Marks kid. Wow.....now back to the game.

End of game Steelers 44, Giants 44. And it stays the same after OT.

Horror:Oh well. We did not win, but we did not loose. So that is fine with me.

I leave the stadium thinking about the events that have happened over the last 3 hours. After today, I feel like I am a new man. The game and Matt have soothed me. Now I have to go to wrestle and win my first match in FDS!!!

O.O.C:I tried my best. What do you think?

[Tony D Enterprises™]

Pretty intresting there, the idea of living a normal life is great because it show's a side of the person that he isn't some sell out person and still acts as a normal person (The fame isn't in his head.)

I liked it, good job.

[hardyz]

Thanks. And I know that you are a Giants fan also(bad choice....lol) So thanks. And anyone else have a response?

[cureforthesickness]

not too bad. You've definately got a good idea, but there's a lot of room for improvement.

The big thing I'm seeing in your roleplays now is tons of people. There's people coming from everywhere, and everyone wants to talk to you and knows exactly what's going on right now with you, life and wrestling wise. This is a bad thing. Add the aura of mystery. Hold down casual conversation if you are going to use "non-wrestlers". I'd also cut down on the amount of people you use. Monologues are bad, but having too many people may actually be worse. With people coming in left and right, you lose track of who's who and none of the "side charecters" really develop anything. A strong side charecter can play an important role to the main charecter.

My advice is to get a core of 2-3 "side charecters" to interact with your charecter. A girl friend, a best friend, an offspring, whatever works for you. Develop this/these charecters, but develop them in a way that benefits your main charecter.

[hardyz]

Thanks Obo and Fred. You two always have good advice and replies. I as always take in all advice given. So anyone have more advice?