Superbrawl RP: Joe Kessen.

[hurricanehelms2]

A man sits on a lonely beach, writing.

What a beautiful site. The sun raising to welcome the new day. Who could ever deny the beauty? The sky is filled with every color of the prism, blues, reds, yellows, oranges. It’s like a big smile from God himself. Quite like my own life recently. God has given me the perfect girl, one that I could have only wished for before. How did I get so lucky? I just wish she could be here on this golden sand with me. I allow my mind to wonder, and wonder it does. It finally ends up thinking about my WFWF career, and the upcoming PPV. As you all know, I have quiet the PPV record in WFWF.

It’s ironic really. My other PPV debut was against a new comer, Cecil Caster, and now I face a man who is retiring. Justin Tyger, you’re one hell of an athlete. I want to thank you for working your ass off for WFWF. It was nice being able to work with you. kayfabe for a moment. This is more then about this. You’re a hell of a guy inside the ring, and out. And I just want to once again say thanks. You really put on some great matches. And in a minute, I will look back on some of those for the fans. But right now lets talk about this Sunday. You and I step into the ring for the first, and only time. I’m returning, you’re leaving, it’s going to be a five star battle, for pride and success. No one wants to return and lose. Just like no one wants to go out a loser. Sadly, you’ll be doing just that. Fans, it’s time I address you. I know when I come out, the millions and millions of you will chant my name. And the half dozen Tyger fans will chant his name. However, after I whoop his ass, I want you all to give him your biggest chant respect, as he exits. Show him some respect. Sure, his career record isn’t all that impressive. His biggest win was against, what Black Ninja? You do deserve respect for giving it your all. But when it comes down to your skills, your average. Me? I’m still a rather new comer to the business. But I’ve already been recognized as a future superstar. I’ve been given more title shots than you could dream of.

Dreams, we all have them. Yet, they are all different. Some, dream of true love. Others, of success in their careers. Some professor, or other smart guy once said they are the gateway to our true desires. Well, probably more than just he said it. But it was kinda right. They can represent our desires. Who can honestly say they never dreamt of what they wanted? Of course, some times they are just random. Or are they really?

Do you dream much, Mr. Tyger? I have a wonderful dream last night. My arm raised in victory, and the ref handing me the Spaceman title. Of course, that won’t be coming true soon. But maybe one day. However, at Superbrawl perhaps part will come true. My arm could, and will be raised in victory. Tyger, do you dream of success or defeat? Dreams are a great thing, aren’t they?

He goes back to his writing.

The past, and the future. Two things we always fear. “He who does not learn from the past, is doomed to repeat it”. Hell, if I know who originally said it. But it doesn’t really matter, does it? The past, we fear because we know what we are capable of. Who would have thought one man could ever band a country together to commit genocide against thousands of their own people? But we have seen it man times. The future, we fear for many reasons. We never know what is next, and the next evil is usually worst than the previous. How could you possible top what Hitler did? I really hope we never find out. And the other reason, good question Mr. Asker. I’m glad you asked. The second reason goes back to the old saying. Sure, we always learn from the past. But how do we know we learned the right lesson? Maybe, just maybe, it’s the wrong one, and we just mess up worse.

Tyger, you have just become the past, your little retire, return, retire, so forth thing is a little worn out. You’ve retired more times than Terry Funk. No one takes you serious anymore. You never learned from the past, and thus you have become a joke. I, I look towards the past and the future. I study the greats and no so great wrestlers from the past to learn to be the best. And I look towards my future, and apply what I learned.

Past, Present, future, none can be without the others.

Love....the most wonderful thing in the world. We would do anything for it. I could bore you with long explanations. But any who have experienced it, don’t need an explanation. And any who haven’t, couldn’t dream of understanding the feelings.

I love this business. And I try to show that everyday I go out to that ring. And Superbrawl will be no different. The fans will see the passion I have for this sport. I only have love for one thing more than this sport. And that is the love for my girlfriend. But that is a story for another time folks. Plus you really don’t want to hear about our kinky sex, now do you? Ah you do fans? Well, too bad folks, sorry, not gonna happen folks.

He leaves the book open, and simply lays back daydreaming.

OOC: I wanted the actual descriptions to be quiet plain. I wanted his dialogue and writing to carry this rp. If you have time please leave me feedback. I like being happy.

[Yukio Blaze]

This was actually good Kessen, a little short, but stright to the point. Now some people might hound you on the kayfabe part, but other than that good stuff. Good luck Kessen

[CBT]

I agree with Yukio, I may be a day late and a dollar short, but this is one of your better rps. it shows something.
I liked your speech, you both came across as a natural good guy, but a guy who fights out of competition. And its in the ring that friendship is disregaurded at the door.
Description was also decent, nothing major, but it flowed well with speech carrying a decent rp. though I always feel you could bring more out of your rps in the form of them. But this is a good return. good luck man

[Revvie®]

This rp is really good man, I told you I was excited about seeing you bringing back Kessen and you didnt dissapoint me and I think you only have from here is getting better. The rp flowed and the speech was good. I like how you mixed thoughts as description but had minor description as well. I think if you worked a little more on your minor and added more detail and then added thoughts then speech it could have helped. This rp was really good though and I cant wait to see more from you. Speech had to be my favorite part though. Great Job and Good Luck!

Rev.

[somethingmore]

Well....I thought you'd disappoint again.....But you really didn't this time..

The speech was great, the Description was also decent.. I liked the "Breaking Kayfabe" part of it..


Tyger, you have just become the past, your little retire, return, retire, so forth thing is a little worn out. You’ve retired more times than Terry Funk.


How's that?? This is my only time.. I've quit and have gotten fired before, but I haven't retired..

[hurricanehelms2]

I guess I was counting quitting as retiring. It's kinda the same thing.

[Kurt Burton: Script Doctor!]

My God tater. This is the first rp of yours I've read that actually had any effort put into it. I have to say, it was a good rp. You should try to put this level of efforts into all your rps.

[Swarm]

Mer....

I really didn't enjoy this at all. This was outright amateur work, to be honest. You start with a description that has no depth or perception or anything. It's just plain and boring and doesn't paint a theme or a picture. Also, the beach setting is almost as cliched as the abandoned warehouse, church, or graveyard. It's just unoriginal and doesn't add anything to the RP.

Also, your speech writing is under-developed and under-researched. You use quotes but can't say who originally used them, you begin points without finishing them. Early on in the RP you talk about your opponent's great matches and say you'll get back to the point, yet you never get back to it and, as a matter of fact, go on to call his work mediocre. It's a ridiculous contradiction. This problem comes when you don't have a character's view in mind and you simply just write a Roleplay, and that never works. Your character has no consistancy here or depth, he goes from arrogant to unsure to cryptic to childish. You don't bring out any opinion or view from your guy's standpoint and we get no idea of your intention for this match.

Really, just not very appealing work at all. Try and develop your character more, get more into his head. Then, when you have that, write from his perspective. It's not that complicated, really.

[Kyzer]

Your last rp for Odium was your best to date, and after reading this, still is. You need description. I know you were trying to make the rp stand on speech alone but it can't do that. Think back to the mindset and the thought process you used on your last rp and do that for the next. This was a step back. The speech is bland and not as good. In the last rp you played the face card very well. This one doesn't really establish you either way. Good Luck.