Loaded RP - Backround of Zef X

[steve55]

A police car pulls up to the arena. A big figure is thrown out of the car. It is Zef X. This 270 pound animal walks into the arena to his locker room.

Zef X- ARGH!!!!!

*punches a hole through his locker*

Zef X- Im sick of this ****!! Im finally free! Free to kick ass!!

Zef is an intense man. After being jailed for 8 years, he is free to kick some ass.

Why did he go to jail? While Zef was only 20 years old, he lost it all on a bet. Zef broke into a bank and robbed the stash.

When two men tried to stop Zef, all he said was "Touch me and i kill you"

One of them stabbed Zef in the arm. Zef took the knife, and killed both of them. Zef escaped the building, but was caught by the cops.

Zef escaped trial by saying that the men stabbed eachother, and he picked up the knife. Zef only pleaded guilty for robbing the bank, and was sentanced to 8 years in prison.

During his time in jail, Zef worked on his body. He lifted and lifted and lifted till he became huge. Zef got in a couple fights while in jail, and destroyed everybody he fought.

Now released, Zef X has come to fight. Zef has come to destroy. Zef is here, ready to kill.



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[Kurt Burton: Script Doctor!]

Umm...

OK, first of all, I understand why you are giving us the background on your character, however, I think going into some detail and describing what is going on. Like, paint the scene, instead of telling us what happened that day, show us what happened.

Also, everything seems kind of generic, so my suggestion is to go through and read everyone's RP's, and learn.

[ohno]

shut baby burton

[Swarm]

Great. Another joke character. This certainly isn't getting old at all.

[glow=red,2,300]LAME[/glow]

[sonstuds]

ohno said:

shut baby burton

I love you, Oh No.

As for the RP, yeah, read some other RPs to get a basic jist of things.

[Calvin]

im not sure what to say about this.. its kinda interesting, has potential of a really good storyline.. if you do it right.