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Post by steve55 on Mar 11, 2008 16:42:03 GMT -5
As cameras roll into the basement after a disturbance, Zef X is found and the basement is a mess.
X- Who the f*ck are you? How dare you come in here!
Zef attacks the camera man. With the camera on the ground, All you see is feet moving and the camera man go flying and take a huge bump to the ground. A scream from X and the camera fades to a messege....
ZEF X
COMING SOON
off topic: and if this was tna, all you would here is...
WHO WAS THAT!?! OH MY GOD THIS MAN IS A MAMMAL!! WHO WILL STOP HIM!?! OH MAYBE SAMOA JOE CUZ WE THINK HES THE GREATEST MAN ALIVE!!
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Post by thedeadidol on Mar 11, 2008 16:53:50 GMT -5
1) You're not booked for Loaded. Loaded is the show name. People add "Loaded RP" to their titles when it's for Loaded. 2) Never mention the camera. it's like a fourth wall. The camera is not really there. 3) Don't attack people in roleplays. It really doesn't serve much purpose.. especially attacking people like camera men, security guards, and fans. 4) No clue what the final bit about TNA was.. but don't do that.. 5) Tell a story with your roleplays. Make your character develop a story within your roleplays. do stuff and make it mean something. The five steps of improving  |
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Post by Wez on Mar 11, 2008 17:28:28 GMT -5
OH MY GOD THIS MAN IS A MAMMAL!!
lol
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Post by Thunder on Mar 11, 2008 18:47:14 GMT -5
OH MY GOD THIS MAN IS A MAMMAL!! lol Don't make useless spam posts in someone's RP. In addition to everything Obo said, read RPs from all the top guys to get an idea of what exactly an RP entails. |
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Post by Drakz on Mar 12, 2008 12:12:21 GMT -5
After reading that I had the urge to crack open my skull just so I might forget Id read it however telling you that wouldn't help  Instead I will help. What Obo has said should all be taken into account, in addition to that try to describe the surroundings, try to actually set the scene. I started to read that RP and it was over before it had even started. Take the time to read some of the RPs here so that you can begin on building some kind of depth to your work and from there you can develop your character Pz X |
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Post by Calvin on Mar 16, 2008 23:28:42 GMT -5
read rps man. This sounds liek something you'd put on the show. It'll be a while before anyone really can tell you what you need to improve on, because clearly this is your first fed so you don't know much on doing rps.
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Post by sonstuds on Mar 17, 2008 11:58:57 GMT -5
Yeah, read other people's stuff to get an understanding of what to do.
In all honesty I'm just replying to this because I'm replying to every RP.
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Post by Revvie® on Mar 18, 2008 16:50:39 GMT -5
Yeah, read other people's stuff to get an understanding of what to do. In all honesty I'm just replying to this because I'm replying to every RP. |
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Post by thedeadidol on Mar 18, 2008 18:56:11 GMT -5
Yeah, read other people's stuff to get an understanding of what to do. In all honesty I'm just replying to this because I'm replying to every RP. I sort of thought it was amusing in Mayhem's roleplay, but it's just awkward here, especially quoting EBR's reply, that was just "do what everyone else says, free post woo" I'm calling you out Shadow  |
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Post by Calvin on Mar 19, 2008 10:51:57 GMT -5
revs getting lazy.
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Post by sonstuds on Mar 19, 2008 21:35:12 GMT -5
I sort of thought it was amusing in Mayhem's roleplay, but it's just awkward here, especially quoting EBR's reply, that was just "do what everyone else says, free post woo" I'm calling you out Shadow I find it funny because by quoting me he's saying he's gonna reply to every RP, which he hasn't and probably won't do. Confoozling situation all around. |
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