Road To Superbrawl- Flash Of Silver

[LCHime]

Road To Superbrawl: Flash Of Silver


I lost to her... By Tapping out but I feel even more in love with her after seeing her kick my so called partners ass. She was even more amazing with her new music and entrance. Something thing made me think though why does she seem so sad sometimes...
Once again it seemed to be another snowy day in Kagura’s home of Cape May, NJ. She watched the waves flowed as she drink her favorite thing low sugar hot coco from Wawa and how dare people say it is like 7-11 it had nothing on them.

She felt a lick on her arm it was her puppy Sakura she was always making her smile when she was in deep thought. She watched her pen fall onto the floor and suddenly the flashback came rushing back to her like a strike of light.

“Hello you must be Kagura Himecho welcome to WFWF. I hope that you will be okay here. Watch out though some of the girls may bite.” she said with a laugh. “Here take this I’m sure even a ninja has no time for pens.” she said handing her a silver pen. “See you in the ring my new rival.”

“That was the first time I met her, Sakura she gave me this pen and I still haven’t gotten my feelings across yet. Wait!”

Valentine’s day! That’s it after Superbrawl and I win I will give her a secret heart and maybe she will think it’s a boy from the circuit it’s foolproof but what kind a sexy one? Nah too forward. Ahh I know a big red heart saying to - love with all of your heart your secret admirer.

“Now that this is out of the way let’s go back to reading my notes.” said Kagura petting Sakura and moving her away.

Let’s see now my greatest rival beside my love is that Kurt Burton who the hell does he think he is Kami our Japan God I don’t think so. I would love to say a few things to him about how he mistreats women esp her the one who shines so brightly and has a future besides him! Next is Ayn she hates me more then I hate men. Best to say away from her. Then there is Emily Star why do these girls tag with me? Why can’t have her who contains my heart and I feel like she knows my love though and though.

“Just think, Sakura this is the final stop before Superbrawl and then hopefully I will be champ I think I can do it and not fail because if I fail I kill no matter who it is.”

I wish with all of my heart that I do not have to face a man but Kami plays mean jokes on me because now I have to face a man named DC doesn’t the head leader know I hate man with a hellish flame all I want to do is throw knives and bring out scrolls of dragons out. Okay so maybe not dragons but something so that way that they are gone out of existence it just pisses me off!

“Maybe I am over thinking this a bit it can’t be that bad besides maybe he will be in a coma before that match or killed while being pushed off the bridge by a short but sexy ninja not saying that it will be by me of course I mean please.” said Kagura laughing looking at the art of her and her crush.

“I didn’t draw this but who did...”

I will beat anyone who stands in my way of my dream and if you get in my way I will slice it right off of you and you know what I am talking about too.

Sorry i didn't write alot i am doing a lot of job hunting lately and haven't got enough time for these things sorry again

[B-Radimus Prime]

So, I’m not very familiar with your work seeing as I haven’t been in the WFWF in quite awhile…but I’m impressed. You seem to know what you’re doing. I’m not sure what’s going on in the storylines yet, but I see that Kagura has a crush on Kat Hamilton and I’m all about the L Word so it sounds like a good idea to me. But yeah, the RP was pretty good. The only complaint I would have is the lack of comma’s…it got confusing to read in some places, it might not be that way for everyone but I’m sort of a grammar freak

Good Luck in your match!

[LCHime]

Shh you say who kagura likes outloud it's going to ruin the story Just kidding but don't tell anyone okay?

[Deleted]

This was good. I like your storyline you've got going here. It is different. Good luck in your match. I can't wait to read some more of your work.

[sonstuds]

I dig the storyline but the formatting/set up again kind of confused me with her talking out loud while also thinking to herself. That really isn't that big of a deal but the grammar issues were. Very distracting at times. Just work on that and you'll be rolling. Finding a good storyline foundation is the key and you already have that, so kudos.

[Calvin]

ok, layout issues are easy to fix. There's some things I prefer like bolded description.. but that's just me.

The idea behind the rp is amazing. The only problem I see is the mention of your opponents all in one paragraph. Now I saw you are job h unting, so I can see that part being rushed. Although, expanding on that would be a good idea for your next rp. Or make the mention it's own part of the rp. Look for an EBR rp to see what I mean about that.

[LCHime]

thankies everyone for your comments i cried a little because of it in a good way.