11/30 Loaded: "The Man Who Knew Too Much"

[Thunder]

This didn't turn out as good as I would of liked, but I didn't have a whole lot of time to work on an RP this week. Since this is really the start of something new here, I'd like to hear what everybody thinks of it.

[Revvie®]

Good stuff man, suspense with a tad of mystery def. is your style and looks good on you. You actually mentioned WFWF and your match which was a very nice touch. I like the idea of the boy having problems b/c that is only logical and of course who was calling? Can't wait to find out!...good rp man, loved it.

Good Luck in our match as well!

Revvie

[Kurt Burton: Script Doctor!]

Hmmm.... Blackmail, traumatized teenager, broken Michael, yup, this storyline is shaping up to be good. Yeah it was a little slow, but considering your style of RP'ing is more like a TV Show then anything else, like a Lost or Heroes, it needs a slow start to lay the foundations the rest will build off of... Nice Work though.

[sonstuds]

I liked it, but I lose a lot of respect for Steve for pissing his pants in that RP a few weeks ago knowing he's seventeen. He needs to go to Oz and get courage.

[Swarm]

I don't think broken VCRs actually loop video footage, they just don't play anything. Hrm.

I dunno, well written and got everything over well but I'm not too much of a fan of storylines that are completely impossible. Plus, as I say to most guys, while you should have your character progress on his own and in that aspect you're doing a great job, the actual comings and goings in the WFWF seem like a sidebar to your character and serve as a device to just further your story each week.

But, in the end, it was well written and interesting and cool, so, kudos.

[veronicaaaahhhh]

This was pretty good, man. I love how you end most of your RP's with a bit of a cliffhanger; it really makes us just want more. I'm beginning to really like how you slowly build up the RP's to the eventual ppv climax RP.

Great story, well written, great job.

Mike