S&S: "Blood On My Hands"

[Thunder]

I really think this is the best RP I've ever done. Any feedback is appreciated.

[Revvie®]

I told you before, it was a great piece of writing. Good Job.

Revvie

[Kurt Burton: Script Doctor!]

Wow... you are a huge fan of Hitchcock aren't you. Great action, paced with little touches of humor. I especially loved the Psycho reference.

"Take your pick, 12 rooms twelve vacancies"

"Mother might hurt someone"

Nice backdrop to an already disturbing portrait of Robert. Its just too bad that Ann had to die.

[bad guy™]

Interesting. It is your best RP to date. I really have no complaints. I am just a little freaked by Robert.

Robert pulled the machete out of his pocket and stared at with amazement. The light bounced off the blade, showing him just how sharp this thing was. Raising in up in front of him, he swiped at the air over and over. He envisioned them all in front of him and with that image in his mind, he made a swipe at each of their imaginary throats. BAM! Right through the jugular on all three of them. For a moment Robert was sure he could even smell the blood. That was over too quick though. He’d have to make sure they all died slow, painful deaths. Maybe, if the mood struck him, he would even have them watch each other die.

The fact that he is that sadistic......

Good luck dude.

[jesterslaugh]

This RP was quite stunning. I really enjoyed the story and the character development. I really haven't read much of your stuff before this, thus I don't know what lead up to this.

But it was still quite spectacular.

[Thunder]

xkaliburr said:

Wow... you are a huge fan of Hitchcock aren't you. Great action, paced with little touches of humor. I especially loved the Psycho reference.

"Take your pick, 12 rooms twelve vacancies"

"Mother might hurt someone"

Oh yeah, big fan of Hitchcock. I modeled Tony after Norman as he is in the book: fat with glasses. Aside from the Psycho references (and there's more than just the ones you mentioned) I got the "que sera sera" line from The Man Who Knew Too Much.

Nice backdrop to an already disturbing portrait of Robert. Its just too bad that Ann had to die.

I am just a little freaked by Robert.

As someone who really wants to be a successful writer, these are the two best things I can hear. I really wanted to get sympathy towards Ann and to get fear/hatred towards Robert. Hopefully someday I'll get the stuff I've written about Robert published, maybe in novel form since I've been working on expansion of the story (more on the family etc.) for awhile now.

[Kurt Burton: Script Doctor!]

realscan said:

xkaliburr said:

Wow... you are a huge fan of Hitchcock aren't you. Great action, paced with little touches of humor. I especially loved the Psycho reference.

"Take your pick, 12 rooms twelve vacancies"

"Mother might hurt someone"

Oh yeah, big fan of Hitchcock. I modeled Tony after Norman as he is in the book: fat with glasses. Aside from the Psycho references (and there's more than just the ones you mentioned) I got the "que sera sera" line from The Man Who Knew Too Much.

Yeah I caught that, and most of the psycho references, those are just the ones I liked the most. I think almost every line Tony has is a Norman Bates line, come to think of it.

[Thunder]

xkaliburr said:

realscan said:

Oh yeah, big fan of Hitchcock. I modeled Tony after Norman as he is in the book: fat with glasses. Aside from the Psycho references (and there's more than just the ones you mentioned) I got the "que sera sera" line from The Man Who Knew Too Much.

Yeah I caught that, and most of the psycho references, those are just the ones I liked the most. I think almost every line Tony has is a Norman Bates line, come to think of it.

Yeah, I decided to all out with the Psycho stuff there at the motel. I've seen the movie so many times that I just knew those lines off the top of my head which is either good or pathetic depending on which way you look at it.

And I would like to think that Robert had some bits of Jack Torrance in him.

[Markw]

Really nice RP Thunder, man Robert sees a right Crazy B****** (He almost scares me as much as Obo ) I really liked the ending, I haven't read much of your stuff lately for some reason but I'll deffinatley be reading again, the description was great and it made Roberts character come off really well, amazing rp the story was great very well done good luck, I hope you win the Title and I think you have a good chance.

[sonstuds]

realscan said:

And I would like to think that Robert had some bits of Jack Torrance in him.

I totally brought that up a few weeks ago. Woo.

I really liked it. I love your hidden pop culture references you'll bust out ("I live on Elm Street, the last house on the left . . ."). In this case signing Sam Loomis, which is specifically great because of the whole "fighting evil" deal.

[Thunder]

sonstuds said:

In this case signing Sam Loomis, which is specifically great because of the whole "fighting evil" deal.

You're the only one that's mentioned that meaning, but it's also a Psycho reference as Sam Loomis is the name of the boyfriend in it.

It's great that there's people here that know all these horror movie references I bust out.

[Kurt Burton: Script Doctor!]

realscan said:

sonstuds said:

In this case signing Sam Loomis, which is specifically great because of the whole "fighting evil" deal.

You're the only one that's mentioned that meaning, but it's also a Psycho reference as Sam Loomis is the name of the boyfriend in it.

It's great that there's people here that know all these horror movie references I bust out.

I actually thought the Sam Loomis was a reference to Halloween, but then again, the psychiatrist in Halloween is a reference to Psycho.

[CBT]

Supreme job on this, and while I've admittedly missed some transitions, I'd almost imagine the story you are telling being one with wrestling as a background. Not a mistress but a step-child, you possess, but choose to ignore or forget about at the most fitting times.

That said, this roleplay was supremely interesting to say the least.

The funny thing is, some people, they really can't take to this style of roleplaying. Going off on a mission, to tell a story, that totally escapes the match at hand.
However, it's a double-edged sword, it also shows how extremely gifted you can be. Telling your story.

I wish you luck for many reasons, if only one, how you made the comeback of the century in 2007. Sure it's questionable to call you the MVP of this fed, but easily with out doubt, you are the most improved.

I gotta say though. With a story like this, how easily can you design your own fate, with a lack of focuse on a particular match being your downfall.

Not here, but as a general. Other-wise, good showing, and good luck my friend.