S&S RP-"Laws of Nature"

[The Rocker]

Setting: Tacoma, Washington
Time: 4:20 AM Day before S&S

[/i]



BJ and Heather lay in bed fast asleep. Heather's slumber was awoken by something. She gripped her chest.

Heather: "BJ, she said hastily.”Stevie's kicking, I we need to get to the hospital. She gripped her chest again.” Right now!"

BJ sprung up. He put his clothes on and grabbed his car keys. He helped Heather down the stairs and tried to ease her pain. They exited the house and got into BJ's car. BJ helped Heather in then jumped in the driver's seat. He sped off towards the hospital.

BJ: "Hang on Heather. We are going to get there soon." BJ said in a soft voice.

Heather took deep breathes as BJ went as fast but safely as he could. She started to groan in pain.

"Please, hurry BJ." pleaded Heather

After about 5 more minutes of driving he pulled into to the Tacoma General Hospital. He quickly got her out of the car and helped her inside. Once he opened the door a doctor."

"Please, she's having a baby." BJ said to the doctor.

"Well take her in the back. I will come back out and to tell you how she's doing later. Please take a seat." The Doctor said as he pointed to the waiting room.


The doctor helped Heather through a door. And BJ lost site of Heather. He thought off the worst. Hours past and patients left the hospital. BJ sat their with the same expression on his face.

BJ waited till 7:45 when the doctor finally came out.

"Well you wife is doing fine. But, we will need to keep her for the next week or so." The doctor stated to BJ.

BJ with a blank look on his face replied, "OK, Thank you. Just call me when she's ready."


BJ walked out of the hospital and drove to the airport.



In the airport BJ got his ticket to Chicago. BJ walked through the tunnel towards the plane, still with an absent minded look on his face. In plane he put his back above him and sat down in his seat. He was silent the whole trip. Still thinking about Heather.


In Chicago, he exited the airport and walked along the busy street. He waved down a taxi.

"Where to?” The cab driver asked

"Solider Field." BJ replied

BJ climbed in the taxi and drove for about 15 minutes to Solider Field. He gave the taxi driver some money and walked inside the arena.

Place: Solider Field, Chicago
Time: 10:00. Minutes before the S&S main event.

[/i]


BJ wore a red. white, and blue attire tonight. He tied up his boots and wrapped his wrist tape. His head was swimming with thoughts about Heather. Is She OK? Will she survive this? Is Stevie OK? BJ walked behind the curtain. Purple Haze played and the announcer introduced him. Would he survive?
-----------------------------------------------------------------------------------
OCC: Well this is it. Hope you liked it. I thought around the middle after I wrote it was kid of boring but I will let you be the judge of that. Rate or Hate

[zombiesx]

This rp had some " marks at random places, that they where not needed.
I want to say something else, I do not think they whould have to keep her for a week, or more.
This rp made no sense, and well I think was not great.
Make your rp's, make sense.

[Calvin]

zombiesx said:

This rp had some " marks at random places, that they where not needed.
I want to say something else, I do not think they whould have to keep her for a week, or more.
This rp made no sense, and well I think was not great.
Make your rp's, make sense.

Irony is so amazing.

[Kurt Burton: Script Doctor!]

zombiesx said:

This rp had some " marks at random places, that they where not needed.
I want to say something else, I do not think they whould have to keep her for a week, or more.
This rp made no sense, and well I think was not great.
Make your rp's, make sense.

Hi pot... I have someone I want you to meet... he is the kettle.

Sadly, though I can't believe it came out of Slash's mouth, it was kind of the truth.

[Revvie®]

EXPAND!...this rp was short...kind of a bore and really didnt give much. Read around a bit on some of the veterans and I think that would help you quite a bit.

Also this made me laugh so hard...hehe..and yes im a perv in some right

Heather took deep breathes as BJ went as fast but safely as he could. She started to groan in pain.

"Please, hurry BJ." pleaded Heather

[sonstuds]

This RP made sense. It wasn't particularly good, but this was no where as comically bad as some RPs. Let's put it this way; I wasn't questioning anyone's intelligence while I was reading it.

Anyways, it was just kind of there. A lot happened but like I told Flamez it's all done too quickly and you don't let the actions process naturally. Thus we don't feel for the characters, thus we end up not having a real connection and it ends up flat.

The ending was the only real "bad" part. Writing something as a segway into the match is usually pretty boring.

As said, let things work themselves out. Someone giving birth is a big deal. You have to write it that way in order for it have any importance.