Final FDS Rp: Seek and Destroy

[recklessmatten]

Reckless walks into a shop. He walks over to the fridge and grabs a crate of beer. Carrying the beer in his hand, Reckless walks over to the till.

That’s 8.99 please....Hey, your that wrestler Reckless?

Yes, that’s me. Why?

No reason, I just enjoy watching WFWF and saw you at SOTF.

Reckless reaches into his pocket and takes out some money to pay for the beer. Reckless grabs the crate and leaves the shop. He walks over to his car and loads the beer into the back seat of the car. The shop owner come outside and stops Reckless.

What happened?

What do you mean what happened?

At SOTF, you lost. How?

Reckless stops and gives the man an evil look. He walks over to the driver’s side and opens the door and steps inside. The shop owner tries to stop him but Reckless slams the door and shoots off towards the arena. His phone begins to ring.

Hello?

Hello Reckless, Its Yukio. You got a minute?

Yeah, let me pull over.

Reckless steers into a near by car park.

Ok, what’s up Yukio?

I can tell your angry about losing and angry at Calvin Lee, so I booked you in a grudge match against him.

Any stips?

No, just a normal singles match. I gotta shoot, meetings to attend. Bye.

Yukio hangs up the phone. Reckless turns the engine on and heads off to the arena. On his way he stops at a sports shop. He walks inside. Reckless walks down to the back of the shop and picks up some tape and a pair of camouflage kick pads. Heading towards the till, he gets stopped by a shop worker.

Excuse me sir, may I interest you in a pair of....

No thanks, this is all I want.

Ok, but can I ask you something?

Sure, what is it?

How did you lose to Calvin Lee?

Reckless slams his items into the chest of the shop worker and storms out of the shop. He gets into his car and goes to the arena. Reckless gets out of his car and takes out the beers, and heads into the arena. He proceeds towards the locker room area and places his beers beside his place. Reckless unlocks his cupboard and takes out his ring gear. Ryan Riddle walks in.

Hey Reckless, how you doing?

I am doing ok, yourself?

I’m fine. Excited after the PPV, and this being the final FDS. Can I ask you a question?

Look Ryan, if its about 'why did I lose' I don't know ok? I honestly don't know. I did not go out there with the intention to lose, so how would I know how I lost ok. Wish people would get off my back.

Err, actually I was going to ask if I could have a beer, but oh well. See you around.

Reckless is holding his head in his hands. He grabs a beer and lifts his head and downs the beer. He reaches into his bag and takes out his ring gear. Slowly, he gets changed as other wrestlers enter the room. They come over to him and shake his hand and get along with their own business. Reckless picks up the rest of the beer and puts in into his cupboard. Yukio comes in.

Reckless, can i have a word?

Sure sir.

Reckless leaves and follows Yukio

I have numerous reports from members of the working community that you were rude to them. Is this true?

Jesus man, all they were asking is why did i lose. What am i meant to do is smile and wave for sake.

Reckless, don't lose your rag with me. All i wanted to say was don't let it happen again.

Sorry Yukio. It wont.

Yukio leaves. As he goes off into the distance Reckless punches a near by wall and storms off. He heads towards the interview area. He sits down on a stool.

Are you happy Calvin. Look what you have done to me. I'm angry, pissed off and unhappy. I can't even control my anger. I can't help but lash out at anyone who asks me about the P.P.V. I can't take it much longer. Calvin, when i get into the ring with you i will find you, and punish you for what you have made me become. Im angry with you Calvin and its time for me to Seek and Destroy.



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Here is my latest RP, been working on it for days, just added the yukio bits today. I like it but its not up to me to decide if its good or not. So feedback would be appreciated.


-Reckless-

[sonstuds]

Heh, Yukio's popular with the HS guys...

A lack of real time here. Reckless gets in a car and drives from point A to point B all in the matter of two sentences. It comes off as if all these places are just across the street and would take about a minute to get to.

Anytime you're going from location to location it basically classifies as another scene. So realistically this is about five scenes, most of which are a little under a paragraph in length. Obviously, that becomes a bit of a problem.

The story here is good enough, but you don't really capitalize on it because of a lack of length and development.

Now, the big flaw with this roleplay?

I have numerous reports from members of the working community that you were rude to them. Is this true?

As cruel as it sounds, I seriously bursted out laughing when I read that. The idea that

a) Random people would tell on Reckless

b) These random people would have Yukio Blaze's phone number

c) Yukio would actually have a talk with Reckless about it

is really quite comical.

Anyways, just work on the progression of things and don't rush them. If Reckless walks into a grocery store and buys something then make it seem like it's important, not just a segway to a two sentence conversation that's only a segway to another brief conversation. Know what I mean?

[recklessmatten]

So your saying to make like each scene longer and expand on the detail?