Revvie®
Main Eventer
Somewhere between Reality, and the Absurd
Joined on: Jun 29, 2005 1:04:26 GMT -5
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Post by Revvie® on Sept 7, 2007 13:58:19 GMT -5
NDE "Near Death Experience"This is about a page and a half on word so yea its short and sweet but its a debut and I wanted to leave plenty of mystery for later rps. I hope you enjoy and there maybe a few errors in coding and grammar but I tried my best to work all that out. So I hope you enjoy this short debut. I am also rusty so any constructive critism would be fabulous!...its not long so yea. Revvie
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Calvin
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visit my myspace and listen to my music
Joined on: Dec 18, 2001 15:13:21 GMT -5
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Post by Calvin on Sept 7, 2007 14:24:31 GMT -5
there is a lot of rust. Your description is well no where near as good as it was when you were champion. It's a good read, it's just not the Reverend Shadow read that I'm used to. Although I'm sure with time that rust will wear off.
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Revvie®
Main Eventer
Somewhere between Reality, and the Absurd
Joined on: Jun 29, 2005 1:04:26 GMT -5
Posts: 4,327
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Post by Revvie® on Sept 7, 2007 14:59:58 GMT -5
there is a lot of rust. Your description is well no where near as good as it was when you were champion. It's a good read, it's just not the Reverend Shadow read that I'm used to. Although I'm sure with time that rust will wear off. Yea i know...like 4 months of a break really shows. thanx for the honesty man ;D
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