Thunder
Main Eventer
WF 10 Year Member
WFWF Record: 59-60-1
Joined on: Aug 6, 2003 9:44:07 GMT -5
Posts: 2,941
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Post by Thunder on Sept 3, 2007 10:57:05 GMT -5
When I started this I had no idea that it would end up being so long, but there's was so much more that I wanted to do I just kept gong with it. I really like the new character I introduce here, so expect to see more of him in future RPs. I really enjoyed writing this and this is probably by far the best RP I've ever done.
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Post by sonstuds on Sept 3, 2007 13:00:41 GMT -5
Nice.
When you first had the "you can drive fine thing" I thought it'd be very clichéd and obvious that he'd get into an accident, but by the end of the RP I thought it worked well just so all three characters ended up connecting.
As mentioned, the way you handled Thunder is what really makes it work. Instead of being the wrestling heel he's just a bad person (who doesn't watch those "don't let your friends drink and drive" commercials, evidently).
Robert was pretty good as well. You were able get into the mind so it wasn't just a "I beat my family cause I want too" type deal.
Excellent work overall.
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Calvin
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Joined on: Dec 18, 2001 15:13:21 GMT -5
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Post by Calvin on Sept 6, 2007 18:43:01 GMT -5
damn, this is long. I really wish I had the time to read this tonight, I'll try to get at it tomorrow, or something I hope I can.
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Post by CBT on Sept 14, 2007 11:17:04 GMT -5
This is a thing of beauty, I'll admit that I'm not the most adapt of what's gone on recently with Thunder. But I read this from top to bottom, and I really enjoyed what I saw. No urge to skim, well except for when Stacy left the theater as I pretty much got a good view of the whole RP.
Now let me say, your execution of this Robert character... It was what I enjoyed the most.
I read the first part with Rob, and I enjoyed it. The second part not so much, that was untill Mom's surprise... which was a hell of a swerve. I see this as fiction, so violence and acts portrayed to me are more important when they make sense... less on how extreme you make them. I had no complaints with that.
Michael on the other hand, I think he almost played second-fiddle to Robert's story. But I think you did accomplish far more than you could imagine when you told his story.
I know it's cliche to bring the wrestling side in, even briefly, when you did so well without it. Also cliche that your two character meet at the end of the road. But I think the way you laid the story out, puts it all in good rationale.
Very good job
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