FDS RP "Let the Feathers Fly"

[x0kimmy]

FDS RP "LET THE FEATHERS FLY"

Traci Brooklyn just arrived at her hotel in Paris, France. While she was walking into her room, suddenly her phone began to ring and Traci answered it.

Traci Brooklyn - Hello?
Candi Starlight - Hey. Sorry about the whole "spotlight" and crap at the Gym.
Traci Brooklyn - Don't worry girl So anyways, I'm in Paris! Where are you?
Candi Starlight - I'll be there probably tomorrow or late tonight.
Traci Brooklyn - Cool. So, I have to choose my outfit for the match still. We could be wearing night gowns and I think the guys would be all over us.
Candi Starlight - haha. Tell me about it. I can't wait.

Both girls laugh and say their good-byes. After they get off the phone Traci begins to take out all her lingerie and looks to see what would be great for the event.

Traci Brooklyn - Hmm. I don't know what to do! Do I got with the Pink and Black? What about the Blue and Purple?

Traci couldn't decide so she decided to get some help. She called for room service and made sure it would be a guy. She hung up and waited for him to come up to the room. He knocked on the door.

Room Service Guy - Room service.
Traci Brooklyn - Come in, it's open.
Room Service Guy - So.. how can I help you out?
Traci Brooklyn - Just sit down.

She made him sit down on the bed and she went into the bathroom. A few seconds later, she comes out in the Pink and Black lingerie outfit. The Room Service guy was in shock and didn't know what to do

Traci Brooklyn - What do you think?
Room Service Guy - Uhh its umm very..
Traci Brooklyn - That's what I figured. You can go now.

He left quickly. Traci Brooklyn smirked as he scurried out of the room.

[zombiesx]

Sweet rp good luck

[sonstuds]

Focus a bit more on adding depth to the things. The conversation, the scene with the room service. They were both pretty quick (though, probably warranted for the room service part).

Otherwise, good enough job.

[cureforthesickness]

for an undercard comedy (comedy is the right word, right?) match roleplay against your tag team partner, it definately serves it's purpose. I would have liked to see some charecter development, but I'm not exactly sure where you're taking your charecter. Everything seems so overly sweet to an almost obnoxious degree, which would lead me to believe it's the classic insinere bitch charecter, ala Pretty in Pink and basicly every other teen movie ever, but I'm not for sure.

You had me interested at "pink and black" though. Hurray for the Hart Foundation!

[x0kimmy]

cureforthesickness said:

for an undercard comedy (comedy is the right word, right?) match roleplay against your tag team partner, it definately serves it's purpose. I would have liked to see some charecter development, but I'm not exactly sure where you're taking your charecter. Everything seems so overly sweet to an almost obnoxious degree, which would lead me to believe it's the classic insinere bitch charecter, ala Pretty in Pink and basicly every other teen movie ever, but I'm not for sure.

You had me interested at "pink and black" though. Hurray for the Hart Foundation!

haha. well I'm trying
I kinda figured thati wasn't doing to much of a good development towards my character, but ill get there

[zombiesx]

I must also admit pink and black+hot, and my guy would love to hit it with your cheater as hes single. Meh you sould gain devolment though add it.

[Thunder]

zombiesx said:

I must also admit pink and black+hot, and my guy would love to hit it with your cheater as hes single. Meh you sould gain devolment though add it.

I'm really not sure what you just said, but if you are suggesting that she add character development to this RP, that's completely wrong. You should never ever go back and add stuff to an RP later.

But maybe I just completely misunderstood you.