FDS Indy Scene RP #1 Today

[Sami Hazard]

^{This continues after the TTHCT in house shows board}

The foursome steps out of Spider's crap pcik-up truck Spider takes out his phone

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Spider: Hello

Voice: Ya

Spider: Hey put on channel 4 in 20 minutes.

The camera turns and you can see the New York skyline

Spider: We are gonna be on

Sheilds: Let's go in

Ashley: We can't go in but we'll watch backstage

Maria: Yeah seeyah!

The men walk away Christian is exited but SPider is indifferent

Shields: This is gonna be awesome we are finally getting some exposure!

Spider: Yeah, k.

Shields: Anything wrong?

Spider: Nah don't worry bout me.

Shields: Whatever

The camera cuts to the set of the Today's show with Matt Lauer sitting in a chair

Matt: Here today we have two very special guests they are WFWF superstars The Independent Scene, Spider and Christian Sheilds!

The crowd suprisingly claps for the duo Christian looks very satisfied.

Matt: So guys, how wrestling treating you?

Sheilds: Pretty good.

Matt: So we hear you are in the Tag Team Heritage Cup.

Spider: Yeah. Our main competetion is the Flamin' Army.

Matt: Heard they got the best of you a couple times.

Spider: Yeah fluke victories but we will exact our revenge.

Sheilds: Well WFWF is all about competiton and thats just what we got.

Matt: Sounds good I think you guys can get them this time.

Spider: Bigger than that we have our Felo de Se, the main WFWF, show debut we're looking forward, but only die hard WFWF fans really know us cause they can't really see house shows on tv cause it's syndicated but it seems enough people know us.

Sheilds: We are really enjoying this exposure.

Matt: Spider you are not a newcomer because from what I hear you had short previous run in WFWF until you got badly injured.

Spider: Yep, that is true and I'm looking at one of my opponents, Christian.

Sheilds: We had a short mini feud, you can say.

Matt: We also hear your morale in WFWF isn't all too high, can you expand on that a little bit?

Spider...

_{check back for the rest of this tomorrow}

[Sami Hazard]

Yep this is Spider and Christina's big break. What can be going through Spider's head you'll have to check back.

[Sami Hazard]

^continued

Spider hesitates to answer about thirty seconds later.

Spider (a soft raspy voice): I'd rather not

Spider walks off and you can see a 2" metal thing sticking out of his back pocket Spider puts his hand back to check if it's there.

Spider walks to an alley he pulls out the metal and ends up being a pistol he stares forward for about ten seconds and slowly lisfts the gun to the side of his head, he inserts his finger into the trigger area and...

Girls Voice: BABE!

Spider (relieved): Ashley!

Ashley: What are you doing aren't you on?

Spider: Yeah I left, wheres Christian?

Ashley: He just called me to tell you it ended and he's on his way to our hotel.

Spider: Alright babe. let's just-

The both start making out, in a very hardcore yet classy, romantic way

Spider: I need you, bave I ing miss you.

Ashley: What wrong?

They stop while looking at each other with thier hands on each other's shoulders

Ashley: You okay?

Spider: Ugh, yeah.

Ashley looks down and sees the gun that he dropped

Ashley: What is this?

Spider: It's nothing.

Ashley: Tell me, it's ok.

Spider: ...

Ashley: If you leave I'm coming with you. YOu know that, I love you.

Spider: I... love you too.

Ashley: Alright, how about we go to your favorite club and do some hardcore action?

Spider (cheering up): Sounds good.

They both walk off when the car with Christian and Maria pull up to the side and leave but little do they know the kind of night they had ahead of them.

[Calvin]

attempted suicides are kinda dumb unless they work out in the right way. In this case it doesn't work out too perfectly. I like the talk show idea though, you could have expanded on that big time.

[sonstuds]

Every idea in this was too short and underdeveloped, honestly.

You never let the reader get a real feel for the character or situation. You're on the Today Show (which would make it seem like Christian Shields and Spider are already established, but that's neither here nor there) then you just write that Spider leaves and is suddenly in an alleyway. I'm reading that and just kinda like "what's going on?".

Also, don't ever have someone say "k". It makes the roleplay look amateurish.