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Post by cureforthesickness on Feb 21, 2006 14:57:43 GMT -5
We see a very dark room, with the only light coming out of a television deep inside the room. The camera comes in extremely close on the television and the pictures that flash upon the screen. On the screen is a man standing in the center of a road, slight fog on the television screen from being paused. A small triangle appears in the top corner with the word “play” below it. Lights come flashing into the screen, before a car comes speeding in, smashing into the man in the center of the screen. We hear the voice of Obo.
Obo: Here you see a prime example of a strong force hitting a weak one. Obviously, the weak force gave way to the stronger.
The tape is fast forwarded a bit, to get to another scene. Another man is standing in the center of another road. The tape is started again, and another man is ran over.
Obo: And the same happens the second time. Justin, take my heed. At the upcoming house show, that ring is my road. And you’re standing right in the middle of the road. And for the second time, you’re going to get ran over.
OOC: For my match with Justin Tyger at house show 2. 200 word limit, and by my count, it comes to exactly 200. No stunt doubles were harmed in the filming of this roleplay
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DAN
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Post by DAN on Feb 21, 2006 15:07:05 GMT -5
Nice, short 'n' sweet RP Obo. I like how you used the "man gets hit by car" to symbolise strenght and weakness, very creative. And good to hear there were no stunt doubles were hurt! Good luck at HS2!
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Post by TZ on Feb 21, 2006 15:52:55 GMT -5
For the limits put on this RP, it wasn't that bad.
The description wasn't too good considering you couldn't waste too much space on it due to the word limit, but that is understandable. I'm glad you added in a bit of detail though. Yet I was a little taken a back by the mentioning of the camera. You haven't done that lately. Quite frankly, I'd wish you to not do it again. Same goes for the word, "we".
Here, the dialouge was pretty good. The symbolism stuff was nice, I always like that. Overall, I saw no problems with it.
I've never liked, "word limit" RP's. I feel they, well, limit the RP'er. But, you made this one work pretty well. However, I'd much rather enjoy a full length RP from you.
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