Odium RP: I dont need this!

[El Manny of Fresh]

[The camera fades in on a pitch black room, no sound to be heard. Then a lighter flicks on and through the dim light, we can see our hero, The Hitman Manny C, lighting a cig up. The lighter goes off and all we can see is the glowing embers of the cigarette. Then a flicker of the TV goes on lighting up the room and filling it up with the sound of white noise. The sound goes away as we can start to see what appears to be….]

Manny C: PORN!

[He was watching porn]

Manny C: I WAS WATCHING HBO!

[Yeah, HBO porn…]

Manny C: You!

[Yeah, anyways, The Hitman begins to flip through channels till he lands on a channel with an ad for the next big WFWF event Odium.]

Manny C: What the hell is this!?!

[The Ad says he will be special guest ref for his tag team champion partner Kurt Burton…]

Manny C: Who was going to tell me this!?!

[The Phone Rings…]

Manny C: The phones ringing…



Manny C: Kurt’s calling

[Muffed voice on the phone]

Manny C: Nothing much bro, I got this a**hole announcer saying everything I’m doing.

[Muffed Voice]

Manny C: Yeah, No ****! When were you going to tell me this?

[Muffed Voice]

Manny C: You Don’t remember…What The !

[Muffed Voice]

Manny C: Your High Aren’t You?

[Muffed Voice]

Manny C: You just cut a promo today high?

[Muffed Voice and then the phone cuts]

Manny C: What ever…

[Manny then walks back to his couch, sits down and finds his show on TV.]

Manny C: Damn man, I got to call a match down the center now don’t I?

[Yes you do]

Manny C: It’s a rhetorical question you idiot.

[Hey I get paid six figures for this, I don’t need to put up with your ****, and I’m leaving.]

Manny C: Hey guy…. mystery voice! **** he is gone. Well at least he doesn’t have to tell anybody that The Hitman and Kurt work as a team, we win as a team. And as far as I’m concerned, the winner might as well already be KURT MOTHERING BURTON.

[And the camera fades to…]

Manny C: You came back!

[Camera Fades to black]

[CM Poor]

I'm not too sure if the narration mocking Manny works or not for a realistic setting - but it's very Monty Python-ish. Karma for that!

[Revvie®]

Uhhhhhhhhhhhhh.......yea.....I'm speachless...I will just say description was needed to some extent....and speech was ok....yea....thats all i got on this one.....

Rev.

[Calvin]

I agree with Kyzer.....although I've never seen Monty Python before......(don't hurt me people). I think I am going to read up on yours and Kurt's bios...because it looks like you mentioned being high in this one too....on the rp though, you do need to move away from humour, and get to more serious stuff in rping. Read other rps to like...get a feel of what you gotta do.

[CBT]

squeaks said:

I agree with Kyzer.....although I've never seen Monty Python before......(don't hurt me people). I think I am going to read up on yours and Kurt's bios...because it looks like you mentioned being high in this one too....on the rp though, you do need to move away from humour, and get to more serious stuff in rping. Read other rps to like...get a feel of what you gotta do.

Kyzer?
SYE= Kyzer?

This RP lacked something, maybe a degree of realness. I'm not really sure the person describing the scene should interact with Manny or Kurt. Maybe i'm missing something, I don't know..

[Calvin]

opps..I dunno what I was thinking there.....twas probalby tired.

[Kyzer]

I personally found this funny. I liked the way you described the scene with the announcer, it is something I haven't seen anyone else here do. So you definitely got points for being original. I am glad to see you and Kurt active. I enjoy both of your promos. I know there wasn't much to say since you are the special ref, but I definitely enjoyed this. You and Kurt make an interesting tag team.