Dr. Mantis Toboggan MD
Main Eventer
I need a monster condom for my magnum sized dong.
Joined on: Nov 25, 2011 16:25:54 GMT -5
Posts: 4,713
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Post by Dr. Mantis Toboggan MD on Mar 27, 2016 11:58:32 GMT -5
I have been a little busy with schoolwork as well as mixing up the dates.
Dr. Mantis Toboggan is a very eccentric man.
Cameraman 1: What a weirdo. Cameraman 2: I know right?
Toboggan overheard this and was not fond. He decided that he doesn't believe these men deserve the footage they were sent to get. He then decides to roofy them, take their wallets, and leave them out in the woods.
Toboggan: Who's weird now?
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Post by Rated R on Mar 27, 2016 13:47:28 GMT -5
I don't even know how to give feedback to this. Honestly. Like at all...
Let's go with the old chestnut of 'go and read the top guys work' because yeah, you should do that. Also really think about how you're going to make this character interesting in a non-comedy way, because if anything that's going to be the thing that stops you from being taken seriously around here.
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Post by CM Poor: DeepFigureValue on Mar 27, 2016 15:42:08 GMT -5
I'm not trying to be a dink - really, I'm not - but I can't even find it in me to give this one a fair shake. I've got no problem with a comedy based character - when the character's name, pic base, and general background is 100% lifted from a pretty well known source.
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Post by jdfranchise on Mar 28, 2016 16:18:40 GMT -5
I'm not trying to be a dink - really, I'm not - but I can't even find it in me to give this one a fair shake. I've got no problem with a comedy based character - when the character's name, pic base, and general background is 100% lifted from a pretty well known source. This.
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Post by Dex on Mar 28, 2016 16:38:01 GMT -5
I'm assuming that this was a 'participation piece.' I'd rather you submit something, than nothing at all, so this was an appreciated gesture for me.
As for the piece itself, there isn't much here to critique. I don't have much of an issue with the basis of the character itself, as long as you alter and develop the character so that it isn't a 'copy and paste' gimmick from the show. I'm intrigued to see what you will do with time.
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Dr. Mantis Toboggan MD
Main Eventer
I need a monster condom for my magnum sized dong.
Joined on: Nov 25, 2011 16:25:54 GMT -5
Posts: 4,713
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Post by Dr. Mantis Toboggan MD on Mar 29, 2016 4:16:32 GMT -5
Yeah, sorry guys. This was a participation piece because I have been a little swapped with school work. I should be able to come up with something better in the future.
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